Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Education play a significat role for the development if child. In this regard, it is consirded by some individuals that primary school should focus on to teached a basic of skills of life to the childrens. I think formal learning play a crucial role in the future of the child and also his carrers.

Firstly,primary school should focus too much on formal learning. on the other words, when the child go first time in school.they don't know how to read or write then the the teacher teached his to formal skills like counting,alphabets and other things for starting his education.primary school teacher play a vital role for become a successful person in life.

Moreover,when children in growing age.They not catch up things properly.formal learning is very important to the future of child. they should aquire knwledge about academic subject.formal learning provide guidance how to focus on learning or hardwork.

It is very important for the child to do physical activity in the primary school. when child studied in primary school his mind or body are growing.On the other hand, when the student did study too much in school they feel mentally tired and feel weakness. That's why school commuties allow to play in ground.

Moreover,when children did physical activity along with studies. In this way, student keep their body fit and when they spend a lot of time together their emotional bonding become strong.

In conclusion, it can be recaptulated formal learning is very for the goog or bright future to the students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you support formal learning and explain that play and physical activity are also important. Your position is clearest in the opening, where you say formal learning is crucial, and in the later paragraphs about tiredness, fitness and emotional bonding. However, the response does not fully answer whether primary schools focus too much on formal learning. The sentence “primary school should focus too much on formal learning” appears to argue the opposite of the prompt, but your later points suggest a need for balance. Ideas such as learning basic skills and becoming successful are relevant, yet they are asserted rather than explained with specific examples. State your degree of agreement clearly and develop each reason with an example or explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs on formal learning and play, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main topics. However, progression between ideas is limited, and several paragraphs repeat the importance of formal learning without adding a distinct supporting point. Linking phrases such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” and “On the other hand” are used, but some do not accurately show the relationship between the ideas; for example, “On the other hand” introduces the effects of studying too much rather than a clear contrast. Sentence boundaries and spacing are also inconsistent, making the flow harder to follow. Organise the body around two clear claims—learning and play—and use transitions that show how each claim relates to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “formal learning,” “academic subject,” “physical activity,” and “emotional bonding.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the intended meaning unclear. Examples include “a basic of skills of life,” “formal skills,” and “school commuties allow to play in ground.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “significat,” “consirded,” “carrers,” and “recaptulated” are also noticeable. Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing education and child development, and check spelling and common word partnerships. For instance, use “basic life skills,” “academic foundations,” and “provide opportunities for outdoor play.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “when” and “because”-like explanations. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction and basic grammar occur frequently, sometimes making relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “when the child go first time in school” has problems with subject–verb agreement and clause structure, while “they should aquire knwledge” lacks a correctly formed verb phrase. Articles, plurals and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the child,” “the childrens,” and “his mind or body are growing.” Capitalisation and punctuation errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters and joining sentences without spaces, further affect accuracy. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with correct subjects and verbs.

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