Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Most of the peoples having controversy about the focus of schools too much having in formal learning for childerns. Next is also imporatant for primary school students learn in the class rooms and also playing some games for children is too much important with study. I am totally agree with with this opinion.

In the firts paragraph, Now a days most of the institututes include primary schools focus too much on formal learning. In my point of view this is good step for those students who are not learn from home or other social media web sites. Most of the students Prefer formal learning because this is easyli standable and easy to learn. On the other hand, Other students Having intertest to learn from Google websites or some others youtube videos. My perspective is Formal learning having too much advantages rather than informal learning. For Example, If the student present in every class they definitely Attend every lecture physically. Attending physically lecture is very helpfull, Because student Understand every topic as well as if he could not understand any topic he definitely asked about with teacher. But on infomal learning give no opportunity to ask or get explanation of any topic.

Second paragraph,Learn something from primary school class rooms. Firts of all playing games is most impotant for primary school students, Because in primary schools the age of students is almost 5 to 8 years old. And they definitely need to play some with school study. Now a days most of primary schools arrange different sports known as sports gala. Every student belonging to different classes, Participate in any sport. This is good approach for primary students.

In conclusion, argues of peoples that most of the primary schools having too much interst to give formal learning to every student. Playing games with study for primary school students is too much important.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: you state agreement with the view that formal learning is important and also say play is important for young pupils. The examples of attending lessons and schools holding a sports gala are relevant. However, the position is not fully clear: you say formal learning is a “good step” and has “too much advantages,” but do not explain whether schools actually focus on it excessively. The discussion also gives more space to defending formal learning than explaining how play supports children’s development. Ideas such as the benefits of games or the limits of classroom-only learning need clearer explanation and specific support. Develop a consistent answer to the extent question, then explain and illustrate both learning and play.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Some sequencing is also signalled by phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph shifts from formal lessons to learning through websites without clearly connecting this contrast to the question. “Second paragraph, Learn something…” is not an effective topic sentence, and several ideas are placed together without explaining their relationship. Repeated transitions such as “Now a days” and “For Example,” along with unclear references, make cohesion mechanical. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, and connect examples explicitly to that point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “formal learning,” “lecture,” “teacher,” “sports gala” and “participate,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “easyli standable,” “having intertest” and “give no opportunity.” Repetition of “too much important” and “formal learning” also limits precision. Aim to use familiar words accurately before attempting more complex expressions, and check spelling and natural word combinations. More precise terms for children’s development and classroom activities would help you explain your position with greater clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “if he could not understand any topic he definitely asked about with teacher.” However, sentence patterns are limited, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some ideas hard to follow. For example, “Most of the peoples having controversy” lacks a clear finite verb, while “I am totally agree” uses an incorrect verb pattern. In “Every student belonging to different classes, Participate,” the sentence structure and punctuation are also faulty. Practise building complete subject–verb sentences, checking tense and agreement, and using articles consistently. Clearer sentence boundaries will make your ideas easier to understand.

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