Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear,My Classmates and Batchmates

Have a greatday to all of us,I wrote this letter because i want you to be a part of the celebration that i want to organized.Its been a ten years after our graduation.

i want to organized a grand reunionof our class.Its better to reunite again after along time that we dont see its other,its better to see you again,i have a proposal also to have an contibution or a fund raising activity.The money that maybe collected in our reunion had a special porpose.We will give a financial help to the retired propesors.Much better to give than to recive.And our Almamater also will recieve a budget came into our fundraising activity.They can use as a budget for the school facility to repair thier classrooms the roof of thier buildings,the main gate of the campus.This reunion has a memorable to all of us we can help other student to study better and comportable.i hope you cooperate with my plan

Cinserly yuors

Rowe Barro

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the main purpose by proposing a class reunion and explaining that it would let former classmates meet again. You also add a fundraising idea, including support for retired professors and improvements to the college, which gives the letter a relevant purpose. However, the requested help is not clearly described: “i hope you cooperate with my plan” is a general appeal rather than a specific request, such as asking your friend to contact classmates or arrange a venue. The celebration itself is also only briefly explained, and the benefits are repeated rather than developed. To make the response more complete, state exactly what you want your friend to do and give a clearer plan for the event.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The reader can follow the broad sequence: you introduce the reunion, explain why meeting again matters, and then describe fundraising and its intended beneficiaries. This gives the letter some organisation. However, most ideas are crowded into one long paragraph, so the shift from celebrating with classmates to raising money for the college is abrupt. Connections such as “its better” are repeated, while some references in “the money that maybe collected in our reunion” are not expressed clearly. Use separate paragraphs for the event, its benefits, and the help you need, and connect each point with clear transitions. A conventional greeting and sign-off would also make the letter’s structure easier to recognise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “reunion,” “fund raising activity,” “financial help,” and “classrooms.” These choices help communicate the general idea, but the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, sometimes making the reader pause. For example, “a grand reunionof our class” and “a budget came into our fundraising activity” do not express the intended meaning naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “contibution,” “porpose,” and “recive.” Build a more precise set of event-planning phrases and check spelling carefully; for instance, describe the money as funds raised and specify how they will be used.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining how the funds could help professors and improve the school. However, the response relies heavily on simple patterns, and attempts at longer sentences are often faulty, which can make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “Its been a ten years after our graduation” and “This reunion has a memorable to all of us.” Verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries also need attention; several clauses run together without clear punctuation. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine them using accurate conjunctions. Proofreading for capitals and full stops will make your meaning easier to understand.

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