Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Friend,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to discuss about an event.

Firstly, we should consider the iportance of celebration, which will contribute to the overall efficiency and well-being of the operation.

Also, I think it would be good to celebrate in this way. So that, everyone can enjoy together and take part in activities.

Lastly, i need your help to organise this event and arrange some of the activities. I request you to help to select some events and costume for party. This will help you to take participate for everyone.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Kind regards,

Navkiran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The letter makes a basic attempt to address the three requested points: it mentions a celebration, gives a general reason (“everyone can enjoy together”), and asks the friend to help choose activities and a costume. However, the event itself is never clearly specified, and the explanation about why it would be suitable is very limited. The phrase about “the overall efficiency and well-being of the operation” is unclear and does not explain a college reunion celebration. The request for help also needs practical detail. The response is 96 words, below the required 150 words; the 10 words copied from the task prompt are excluded from that count. Develop each bullet with relevant specifics, such as the venue, format, activities, and particular tasks for your friend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence, using “Firstly,” “Also,” and “Lastly” to move through its points, and it includes an opening and closing. This gives the reader some basic organisation. However, the progression is not consistently clear: “Firstly” introduces the importance of celebration rather than the proposed event, while “Also” begins an incomplete explanation (“So that, everyone can enjoy together”). The paragraphs are brief and do not build on one another, and “This will help you to take participate for everyone” makes the connection between the request and its purpose difficult to follow. Use separate, developed paragraphs for the event, its benefits, and the help needed, and connect ideas with clearer references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small range of relevant words, including “celebration,” “activities,” “organise,” and “help,” so the general topic is apparent. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often too vague to describe the proposed reunion. “An event” and “some events” do not tell the reader what kind of celebration is planned, while “efficiency and well-being of the operation” is an unsuitable and confusing phrase in this context. There are also spelling and word-choice problems, such as “iportance” and “take participate.” Choose precise terms for a reunion, its activities, and the practical assistance required; for example, name a dinner, venue, or programme rather than referring generally to an event.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter uses mostly simple sentence patterns, and several basic clauses are understandable, such as “I hope to hear from you soon.” There is an attempt to vary sentence openings and to use a subordinate clause in “which will contribute…”. However, control is uneven: “I am writing to discuss about an event” has an incorrect grammatical pattern, and “So that, everyone can enjoy together” is a sentence fragment. The construction “This will help you to take participate for everyone” is also difficult to interpret, and the lowercase “i” is a punctuation and capitalisation error. Practise complete sentences and accurate clause connections, and check verb patterns and punctuation before sending the letter.

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