Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear,Jean

How are you?I hope you are in good condition upun reading thid letter of mine.It's been a long time after graduation we don't see it's other again.I wrote you this letter because i want you to know that i want to organized a reunion of our class in college.This celebration is also have a porpose to meet all of our classmate in colleges and our propesor's also.I need your help because i cannot make this alone.This event that i was planed have a benifits to all retired propesor's.We can do some fundraising activity so we can help or donate some cash in our almamater and the other student will be benifit.Somehow i can't ask you how much we need to organized this event.Your the one person that was ask abuot my planI need your cooperation pls help me to make it happen.Im so exited for this kind of celebration and we can injoy and talk each other again.

Yur's truly.Rowel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by proposing a college reunion and explaining that it would bring classmates and professors together. You also give a reason for the event—raising funds to support the college and its students—and ask your friend for cooperation. However, the requested help is not clearly specified: “I can't ask you how much we need to organized this event” is difficult to interpret, and you do not say what practical tasks your friend could take on. The type of celebration is also only broadly described as a reunion, without details about what participants would do. Develop these points more clearly and make the request specific, such as asking your friend to contact classmates or help choose a venue.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you greet your friend, introduce the reunion, explain its fundraising purpose, and ask for help. This gives the reader a basic sense of the message. However, the ideas run together in one long block, and several transitions are unclear. For example, “This event that i was planed have a benifits to all retired propesor's” is followed by fundraising, but the connection between helping retired professors and supporting the college is not explained. The sentence beginning “Your the one person…” also runs into “I need your cooperation” without clear punctuation. Use separate paragraphs for the proposal, its benefits, and your request, and connect each idea explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “reunion,” “classmate,” “fundraising activity,” “donate,” and “cooperation,” so the reader can identify the event and its purpose. However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make the message harder to understand: “porpose,” “benifits,” “almamater,” and “injoy” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “in good condition upon reading this letter” and “talk each other again.” Choose familiar, accurate expressions rather than attempting phrases that do not fit the context. Proofreading spelling and learning natural collocations for invitations and event planning would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses, for example, “We can do some fundraising activity so we can help or donate some cash,” and the letter includes both statements and questions. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation. Examples include “i want you to know that i want to organized,” “This celebration is also have,” and “the other student will be benifit.” These errors make some sentences difficult to follow. There are also run-on sentences, such as “Your the one person that was ask abuot my planI need your cooperation.” Practise accurate past and future forms, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries; then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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