Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

What's up? I hope you'r doing great and having fun. Today I'm writing to inform you that I'd like to host an event near Scarborough Pumping station on occassion of the 10 year anniversary since we graduate from college with our friends.

I'm thinking of organizing picnic on this spot only because as we had our survey camp on our last semester in this place, to rewind the memories that we'd with our friends. It'd be great if all our friend would join this event. In my opinion, it'd great because on picnic we can enjoy the food and have drinks overwhelmed by Lake Ontario. We can bring our family too since this place has lot of space for over hundred people. We can introduce our families with each other.

At last, I'd be grateful if you could help me to make this picnic successful by informing our friends and classmates , even though we 'r not in touch with each and eveyone. I'd consider it successful if half our friends attend this event.

See you soon

Phurba

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you propose a picnic near Scarborough Pumping Station, explain its connection to the survey camp and the chance to bring families together, and ask John to contact classmates. These details make the plan relevant and give the letter a clear purpose. The explanation of why the location would be enjoyable is less developed: “enjoy the food and have drinks” and the view of Lake Ontario are mentioned, but the benefits could be linked more clearly to the anniversary. Your request for help is also quite specific in one respect—contacting people—and the attendance target adds a useful detail. To strengthen the response, explain how John might help with practical arrangements as well as invitations, and develop the reasons for choosing this celebration a little further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening that introduces the plan, a paragraph describing the picnic and its appeal, and a final request for help. This progression makes the main message easy to follow. You also use some linking expressions, such as “because,” “since,” and “At last,” to show relationships between ideas. However, several ideas are crowded into the middle paragraph, and the connection between the location, the memories, and the family gathering could be signposted more smoothly. The phrase “At last” is not the most natural transition into a request, and the comma before “even though” interrupts the sentence. For stronger cohesion, separate the reasons for the venue from the practical benefits and use transitions that clearly signal each step.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the event and its purpose, with relevant terms such as “picnic,” “survey camp,” “anniversary,” and “classmates.” The reference to Lake Ontario and the college memory also gives the letter some specific, personal language. However, several word choices and collocations are noticeably inaccurate or unnatural, including “on occassion of,” “rewind the memories,” and “drinks overwhelmed by Lake Ontario.” Spelling errors such as “eveyone” and “occassion” also reduce accuracy. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the plan, but they make parts of the letter less clear and natural. Build precision by learning common combinations such as “celebrate the anniversary,” “reminisce about old times,” and “enjoy drinks with a view of the lake.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause with “because” and a sentence explaining that families can attend “since this place has lot of space.” The overall meaning remains understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to limit control. Examples include “since we graduate” instead of a past-tense form, “all our friend would join,” and “it’d great,” which is missing a verb. The opening also contains “you'r doing,” where the contraction is incorrectly formed. Aim to check tense consistency when describing past college events, subject–verb agreement, and articles, as in “a lot of space.” More accurate control of these basic patterns would make your varied sentences easier to read.

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