Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear shri, I hope you doing well , long time ago see. Do you still remember me? Both of lot things. You learn about me science practical fight for me. And always,I miss you so much my friend. As you know, we were left college for about 10 years. So I want to celebrate this 10th anniversary with our classmate and friends. Last month of our college lives, Prisha let us wrote a letter to the 10 years later’s us. Moreover,We can bring some gifts to our friends and classmates. This will be great chance to remind our enjoyful and lively teenager school lives .but my best friend is very good person. I am really good thing friends and classmates. We can college embracing events and celebrate. However, could you please help me to contact with Preksha and ask her about letters? Talk to you letter I really want to say that again I really miss you see you later! Your bestie, Gopi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make a relevant attempt to invite your friend to a ten-year college reunion, and you mention a possible activity: bringing gifts and reading the letters written at the end of college. You also ask for help contacting Preksha about those letters. However, the event itself is not clearly described, and the reason for celebrating this way is only partly explained; the reference to remembering your school years suggests a reason but is difficult to follow. The request for help is also narrow and unclear, while several sentences do not communicate a relevant idea. To address the task more fully, state a specific plan, explain why it would suit the group, and identify practical help such as contacting classmates or arranging a venue.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The letter has a recognisable opening, moves towards the anniversary, and ends with a friendly sign-off. Some linking expressions, including “As you know,” “Moreover,” and “However,” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not clearly separate the reunion plan, its benefits, and your request. Several sentences are fragmented or unclear, such as “Both of lot things” and “I am really good thing friends and classmates,” so the reader cannot reliably see how one idea leads to the next. Organise the letter into clear paragraphs for greeting, event and reasons, and the help requested; use simpler, more direct links between those points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary suited to a personal letter, such as “anniversary,” “classmates,” “gifts,” and “best friend,” and the warm tone is appropriate for writing to a college friend. However, many expressions are inaccurate or difficult to understand, including “enjoyful and lively teenager school lives” and “college embracing events.” Some word choices appear to be attempts at more expressive language, but they do not convey a clear meaning in context. There are also spelling or form problems, such as “letter” where “later” is intended. Build accuracy with familiar collocations before reaching for elaborate phrases: for example, say “happy memories of our college years” and “organise a reunion.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “As you know, we were left college for about 10 years” and “could you please help me to contact with Preksha,” but control is weak and many sentences are incomplete or difficult to interpret. Errors include missing auxiliaries in “I hope you doing well,” incorrect verb forms in “Prisha let us wrote,” and unclear tense and sentence structure in “Last month of our college lives.” Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, with commas and full stops often misplaced. These problems frequently obscure the intended meaning. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using controlled clauses, such as “I hope you are doing well” and “Could you contact Preksha and ask her about the letters?”

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