Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Rahul,

I"am writting this letter to thank you from bottom of my heart about making me feel like my during my visit to your hometown for everything.

Aboutly, it was great to meet you after a long time; it made me remember about the past days we spent together how we used to spend whole days watching movies and playing video games. Firstly, i would thank you for taking care of me at your home for stay and other amenities,it would cost me buch of money to stay at hotel room.Not only this, also taking me out at famous places of your city.

Moreover, the butcher garden where you took me was absolutely tremendous, the greenery all around. There I saw thousand varieties of plants and flowers. Secondly, Curtus Lake, located in kenloops was amazing the water was clean and coloured blue.

Despite of everything, the trip was amazing. Now it is your turn to visit my city and explore the falls and many other places

I wish to see you soon and make more memories together for life.

With love,

Harneel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses the purpose of thanking a friend for their hospitality. However, the tone is inconsistent, and some parts of the task are addressed with limited detail. While you mention the visit to the butcher garden and the lake, the connection to the 'thank you' purpose is sometimes overshadowed by simple listing. To reach a higher band, ensure that the development of ideas is more balanced and that the tone remains consistently appropriate for a personal letter throughout the entire response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the narrative. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the transition 'Despite of everything' which is used incorrectly in this context. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, making the flow between sentences feel a bit disjointed. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the ideas progress more naturally and logically throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'Aboutly' instead of 'Actually' and 'buch of money' instead of 'a lot of money'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are natural for the context of a friendly letter. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives would also enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'I"am writting', 'thank you from bottom of my heart', 'taking care of me at your home for stay'). While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. You should focus on proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms to improve the overall accuracy of your sentences.

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