Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.
Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter
• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise
• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way
• describe what help you need to organise this event
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Dear friends,
I hope you are doing well. I am inviting you on my marriage annivarsry which is held on 7 februray. I will oraganise a party. You all know my marriage was to early. I could not invite you on this time. So it would be a great opportunity for us to meet each other. In addition, we will remember our colleage days which are good memories for us.
Moreover, i need your help in order to celebrate this event. Because i want to give surprise to my husband. I will book a restaurant for that. Please everyone will arrive on time. So that we will do all arrangements like make a list of people who wil be invited and list of items which will be necessary for the prepration such as flowers and food and drinks. I hope you will arrive at time and make my annivarsary special and memoraval.
Your's lovingly,
Name Sony Kaur,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to address the specific prompt requirements. The writing task instructions specifically asked you to write about an anniversary celebration for college friends ten years after leaving college. However, your response invites friends to your marriage anniversary and discusses surprising your husband, which completely misses the core topic of a college reunion. While you do mention organizing a party and asking for help with preparations, the deviation from the prompt's central theme means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, it is essential to read the task instructions carefully and ensure that all bullet points and scenarios match the prompt requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The letter is organized into paragraphs, and basic cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Moreover', and 'So that' are used to connect ideas. However, the logical progression is occasionally disrupted by abrupt shifts and unclear referencing, such as the sudden instruction 'Please everyone will arrive on time. So that we will do all arrangements'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks smooth transitions. Overall, the organizational structure shows some control, but the mechanical and sometimes inaccurate use of cohesive devices places this response in the lower-middle bands.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text. Examples of errors include 'annivarsry', 'februray', 'oraganise', 'colleage', 'prepration', and 'memoraval'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a general message, these frequent inaccuracies impede communication and restrict the range of lexical items. To achieve a higher score, you need to expand your vocabulary range and focus on accurate spelling and correct word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but attempts at complex structures are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'which is held on 7 februray', 'marriage was to early', 'invite you on this time', and 'will do all arrangements'. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, with fragmented expressions like 'Because i want to give surprise to my husband.' These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and demonstrate limited control over complex grammatical structures.
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