Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear friend sita

I hope you doing well I'm writing to tell you about an idea forour ten year college unniversary.

we are left ten year ago college you know this event now i oragnise the party unniversary and i invited all friends and our college teachers could you help me inviting friends because i forgot many friends number and address if you help me find the friends then i am very glad.

I would like to celebrate unniversary in this way because in recent month we are left the college i would like to celebrate this unniversary in college because our college friends come that i hope you understand my idea and you help me find friends inviting.

I mostly assent of all friends because I'm not alone manage this organise i need help decorating lighting food manage cook foods because this organise is hard work if we all come to join celebration and help than i will very glad .

your lovely xyz .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by proposing a college anniversary party, explaining that it would bring former classmates together, and asking Sita to help contact people and organise practical details. These points are relevant, but the task is only partly developed: the event itself remains vague, and the reason for holding it at college is not clearly explained. The sentence about having left college “in recent month” also makes the timing of the anniversary confusing. Your request for help is present, but it would be clearer if you specified what you want your friend to do first. Develop each bullet with a little more precise detail and make your purpose clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: an opening, the event idea, reasons for it, and a request for help. Paragraph breaks also separate some of these functions. However, progression is not consistently clear, and ideas are repeated—for example, you ask several times for help finding or inviting friends. Connections such as “because” and “if” are used, but some links do not clearly show how the ideas relate, as in “because our college friends come.” The closing is also separated from the main request without a clear transition. Organise the letter around the three task points, use each paragraph for one purpose, and avoid repeating the same request.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the central ideas, including “celebrate,” “friends,” “teachers,” “decorating,” and “food.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the message difficult to follow, such as “assent of all friends” and “manage this organise.” The repeated use of “anniversary” and “friends” also limits variety. Spelling errors, including “unniversary,” “oragnise,” and “inviting” where you mean “invite,” further reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural phrases for planning an event, and check spelling and word forms carefully. For example, describe the event as a reunion or celebration and refer to organising the arrangements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using “because,” “if,” and “that,” but these structures are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are not reliably marked. For example, “I hope you doing well I'm writing” needs a verb form and punctuation, while “we are left ten year ago college” has problems with tense and sentence structure. There are also errors in articles, agreement, and verb forms, as in “I'm not alone manage this organise.” These frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to understand. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Pay particular attention to past-tense forms, subject–verb agreement, and full stops.

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