Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Alex,

I'm writing to you a letter, just to let you know that im planning a big event for our college annivesary.

First; I need to inform you that, I already book my ticket back home, and planning to invite our classmates from college to have get together and to propose one of our batch meet you know him already, were already in relationship for three years.

Therefore, i would like to celebrate this way, to surprise her and i want the help of our batch meet please just let thgem know my plan. so that it will not be obuse that i will propose from her.

Overall; i know that you are good on this idea that im planning, because your the reason, why she was my girlfriend with the help our batch meet. same tactics that we did before

Im looking forward, for your big help on this... cheers see you soon.

Sincerely Yours,

Rain,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make an attempt to describe a reunion and explain that you want to surprise your girlfriend by proposing, so the reader can identify a personal reason for the event. However, the task is only minimally addressed: the celebration itself is not clearly planned beyond inviting classmates for a get-together, and the reason this format would be good is difficult to follow. The request for help is also vague—“just let them know my plan”—and it is unclear who “them” refers to or what practical help Alex should provide. Develop each bullet directly: specify the event, explain why it suits the anniversary, and ask for concrete assistance such as contacting classmates or arranging a venue.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable opening and closing, and it moves broadly from announcing a plan to explaining the surprise and asking for help. However, the ideas are not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow the plan. For example, the first paragraph introduces a ticket home, classmates, a “batch meet,” and a proposal in one long sequence, without showing how these details connect. “Therefore” does not clearly introduce a consequence, while “Overall” does not function naturally as a summary here. Pronoun references such as “him,” “her,” and “them” also make the relationships and requested action unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the event, its purpose, and the help needed, with clear references and simpler links between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to a personal letter, including “event,” “classmates,” “surprise,” and “help,” and the reader can recognise the general topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the message difficult to interpret. “Batch meet” is unclear, and “obuse” appears to be an inaccurate attempt at “obvious.” Phrases such as “celebrate this way” and “big help” are vague rather than precise. There are also spelling and form errors, including “annivesary,” “thgem,” and “im.” Build a more precise set of expressions for organising a reunion, such as “class reunion,” “contact our former classmates,” and “help coordinate the arrangements.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic time and reason relationships, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the intended meaning uncertain. For example, “I already book my ticket back home, and planning to invite” has inconsistent verb forms and lacks a clear subject for the second action. In “I would like to celebrate this way, to surprise her,” the sentence structure does not clearly connect the purpose to the event. Other problems include “your the reason” and “with the help our batch meet,” where sentence structure and grammatical forms are incomplete or inaccurate. Use shorter, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement, verb tense, articles, and punctuation before attempting longer constructions.

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