Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear amritpal singh

Hello amrit how are you am thinking to organise an event to celebrate our 10 years anniversary i would like to organise a singer concert in our collage hall and the singer i like to call is satinder sartaj because he is a sufi singer and also he sung alots of songs regarding to college life when he will sing a song about college we all will remeber the days which we spent with each others at that time and it will be a quick refresher for our loved memories so i need help from your side because it will be a big event and it need funds to celebrate this so its your duty to collect funds from every friend and second help i want from you is that you have to invite every friend because i dont have the contact numbers because my phone broke last week so i look forward from your side

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points in the task: you propose a concert in the college hall, explain that the singer’s songs could bring back shared college memories, and ask Amritpal to collect funds and invite classmates. These details make the purpose clear and relevant. The explanation of why the event would be enjoyable is more developed than the practical arrangements, which are stated briefly; for example, you do not explain how or when the funds should be collected. The request that it is “your duty” also sounds rather forceful for a letter to a friend. To strengthen the response, develop the arrangements and make the requests more tactful, while keeping the clear event idea and personal reason.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas follow a broadly sensible order: you introduce the anniversary, describe the proposed concert and its appeal, then move to the help you need. However, the response is presented as one long block, and the repeated use of “and” and “because” makes the progression difficult to follow. The sentence beginning “because he is a sufi singer” contains several ideas that would be clearer as separate sentences. There is also little signposting between the event explanation and the two requests. Use paragraphs for the proposal and the practical help, and connect ideas with a wider range of clear transitions. A closing sentence and sign-off would also give the letter a more complete structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “celebrate,” “concert,” “funds,” and “contact numbers,” and the reference to songs about college life helps convey a personal tone. There are also attempts at more expressive phrasing, such as “a quick refresher for our loved memories,” though this wording is not natural in English. Several spelling and word-choice errors—such as “collage,” “alots,” “remeber,” and “each others”—reduce accuracy and polish. Some phrases, including “collect funds from every friend,” could be expressed more naturally and precisely. Build a reliable range of collocations for invitations and event planning, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates its main message and attempts to link ideas in longer sentences, including the explanation of how the concert could recall college memories. However, most of the writing relies on a single extended sentence, so the range of sentence structures is limited and errors accumulate. For example, “Hello amrit how are you am thinking” lacks sentence boundaries and the subject “I”; “it need funds” has an agreement error; and “when he will sing” uses an unsuitable verb form in this time clause. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent. Use shorter, complete sentences alongside some carefully controlled complex ones, and check subjects, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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