Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Hi Rahul,

Hope you are doing well.

I am writing this letter to inform you that i am organsing an event to celebrate our ten year anniversary in Queenstown with all our friends from college.

You know that, we are planning to travel Queenstown from our college days but its never successed. But this is the best time to complete our Queenstown trip with our old friends. Adddition to this, one of my relatives have charity house there, so we can arrange a event to rise a funds for needed people.

By doing this, we can meet together and not only help people but also contribute our time on good things

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify a celebration idea—a trip to Queenstown—and give relevant reasons, including reconnecting with college friends and raising funds for people in need. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it does not clearly describe the event’s arrangements, and the required explanation of what help you need from Rahul is missing. The letter also ends without a closing or a clear request, so its purpose is incomplete. The response is 111 words, below the required 150-word minimum, which limits how fully you can develop the three points. To improve, explain what Rahul could do, such as contact classmates, arrange transport, or coordinate the charity event, and add practical details about the celebration.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas are generally understandable and follow a basic sequence: you introduce the anniversary plan, explain why Queenstown is meaningful, and mention the charitable purpose. Phrases such as “You know that” and “By doing this” help connect the reasons to the proposal. However, the response has no paragraph breaks, and the progression stops before the final task point: there is no transition into a request for Rahul’s help. Some linking is awkward or unclear, particularly “Addition to this,” and the opening moves quickly from the purpose of the letter to several reasons. Use separate paragraphs for the proposal, reasons, and request, then finish with a clear question or next step.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a suitable range of topic vocabulary, including “celebrate,” “anniversary,” “charity,” and “contribute,” which makes the main idea clear. There are also attempts to express more specific concepts, such as “raise funds” and “charity house.” However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce accuracy, including “organs ing,” “successed,” and “Adddition”; the intended meanings are still mostly recoverable. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “complete our Queenstown trip” and “contribute our time on good things.” Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, say “make the trip we planned” and “devote our time to a worthwhile cause.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You communicate the main message using both simple sentences and some longer structures. The sentence beginning “By doing this” also attempts to combine two benefits, showing some range. However, grammatical control is uneven. In “I am writing this letter to inform you that i am…,” the pronoun should be capitalised, and the sentence needs accurate verb forms. “One of my relatives have” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “we are planning to travel Queenstown” is missing a preposition. The comma after “You know that” is also unnecessary. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the general plan, but they make the letter less accurate. Practise agreement, articles, and prepositions, and proofread sentence punctuation.

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