Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college.

Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter

• say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise

• explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way

• describe what help you need to organise this event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Friends,

I am writing this email to discuss ten years since i left college.

Body Paragraph 1 Details:

The main concern is celebration event your are like to organise such as snacks, pizza and tea.

Body Paragraph 2 action:

I think it would be good to celebrate in this way their are some groups games. I enjot a lot ofr this event.

I help to organise this event my friend and my family there are some enjoy in this event.

Conclusion:

Thank you for your attention. I expect a response within last week. Please contact me at [redacted phone] for further clarification.

Your Sincerely,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes a limited attempt to address the three requested points: it mentions food such as “snacks, pizza and tea,” suggests group games, and says help is needed from a friend and family. However, the event itself is not clearly planned, the reason this format would be enjoyable is only briefly stated, and the help required is not specified. The letter also does not clearly establish that it is inviting a college friend to help organise a ten-year reunion. The response is 94 words, below the required 150 words, and 10 words copied from the prompt were excluded from that count. Develop each bullet with concrete details, such as a venue, date, activities, and specific tasks for your friend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the message into an opening, sections about the event and help, and a closing. The reader can identify the general topics, including food, games, and assistance. However, the labels “Body Paragraph 1 Details” and “Body Paragraph 2 action” are not natural parts of a personal letter, and the ideas within the sections do not progress clearly. Connections between sentences are weak, as in “I think it would be good to celebrate in this way their are some groups games.” Use a simple letter structure with connected paragraphs: explain the reunion plan, give reasons for it, then make a clear request for help. Linking words should show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant words for the topic, including “celebration,” “snacks,” “pizza,” “games,” and “organise,” so the basic subject can be recognised. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several phrases are unclear or unnatural, such as “The main concern is celebration event” and “I enjot a lot ofr this event.” Spelling mistakes, including “enjot” and “for” written as “for” with an extra letter, also reduce accuracy. Choose more precise expressions for a reunion and for the help you need, such as arranging a venue, contacting classmates, or planning activities. This would make the message clearer and more appropriate for a friendly invitation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writer attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the basic intention is sometimes understandable. However, control of sentence structure is inconsistent. For example, “your are like to organise” has an incorrect verb construction, while “I think it would be good to celebrate in this way their are some groups games” joins ideas without a correct grammatical link. There are also problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation, and the closing “Your Sincerely” is not correctly formed. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use conjunctions or full stops to separate ideas. A wider range of accurately controlled sentence patterns would make the letter easier to follow.

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