Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Having hobbies is utmost important for any individual whether it's children, working individuals, youngsters or retired elders, I firmly believes that one should have a hobby or anything they want to do in their spare time such as art and crafts, playing an instrument, gardening etc to explore their creative side and surely divert their mind from overthinking and stressful situations.

In the recent times children spend more time on useless activities rather than spend it creatively, it's not only opens creative doors for them but also widen the horizon of their imaginations. For example, if a kid is good in his or her creative side along with academic, they can open multiple career opportunities for them, and can get admission in the best art schools in the world. And for people in their mid thirties who are mostly busy with their work schedules seems super stressed and drained because of their hectic routines, should also have something in which they find calm and peace. For instance, Playing a musical instrument or gardening creates a sense of relaxation and calmness among the individuals.

On the other hand, certain people can argue that mostly working individuals don't get enough time in their day to day routine. Children and teenagers nowadays also prefers socialising rather than stick to one hobby.

From my standpoint, I do think that socialising is important and it is very difficult to make a room for an activity aside from busy schedule for working people but I personally believes that to get out of an anxiety and from overthinking thoughts having something you love to do in your spare time is important and for children it is very beneficial for their creative learning and exploring.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you believe people of all ages benefit from having a hobby, and you give relevant reasons about creativity, relaxation and managing stress. The examples of children developing artistic opportunities and adults finding calm through music or gardening help support your view. You also acknowledge the counterargument that busy workers lack time and young people may prefer socialising, then explain why hobbies remain worthwhile. However, the discussion of retired people is not developed beyond the opening reference, and the point about children’s career opportunities is asserted rather than explained in detail. Develop these less fully addressed ideas with a specific example or clearer reasoning to make the response more balanced and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable progression: it introduces your opinion, gives reasons and examples, considers an opposing view, and returns to your position. Paragraphing broadly supports this structure, and phrases such as “For example,” “On the other hand,” and “From my standpoint” help signal relationships between ideas. At times, however, the first paragraph contains several points in one long sentence, and the second paragraph shifts quickly from children to working adults. Some connections are also mechanical or unclear, particularly the move from socialising to the final claim about anxiety. Use clearer topic sentences and divide related ideas into shorter, more focused units; make the relationship between each example and your main argument explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “creative side,” “career opportunities,” “hectic routines,” “relaxation,” and “overthinking.” These choices make your main ideas understandable, and you attempt some less common expressions. However, several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “utmost important,” “open creative doors,” “widen the horizon of their imaginations,” and “overthinking thoughts.” Repetition of “important,” “individuals,” and “calm” also limits flexibility. Aim for more natural collocations and precise wording, while keeping your meaning direct. For instance, describe hobbies as “highly beneficial,” say they “foster creativity,” and refer to “persistent anxious thoughts” rather than repeating “overthinking.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and relative clauses, as in “if a kid is good in his or her creative side…” and “people in their mid thirties who are mostly busy…”. The overall meaning remains clear, but some errors in agreement, verb forms and sentence construction reduce accuracy. Examples include “I firmly believes” and “children and teenagers nowadays also prefers,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “it’s not only opens,” which combines incompatible verb forms. Several sentences are joined with commas despite containing multiple complete ideas, making them difficult to control. Check subject–verb agreement and build long sentences around one clear main clause; use full stops or semicolons where ideas need separation.

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