Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays everyone is busy in their lives.Hobbies can play a good role in all age groupes.So its important to have at least one hobby. They would like to do at all life stages.

Children are the first stage, when human start learning things and find what they like or not. At this point hobbies can be a way for kids to express their happiness.For example if infants start running on their daily bases,it is good for their mental and physical health.Some kids like doing drawing and singing it can also help them focus and constrate. Apart from that, if we talk about young adults it is benefical for them to have one thing they like to do. Adulthood is a stage when they have alot of energy and things distract them too easily. At that time if they good hobbies it not only give them good dirction ,but also they can find their motive in those fields.For example if any 11 grade student playing hockey as a hobby, in future he will be in the good team and can play for country.

Working environment increasing nowadays. People even work two jobs to support their familes.They face stress ,anxiety ,demotivation,and useless somrtimes.In these kind of situations if they have anything like reading ,playing any game ,walking ,dancing anything that help them to relax and believe in themselfs.They can stand again and focus more on their work . Last but not least old age people,at that stage when people are retired and nothing to do hobbies can help them to find way of living.If they like to do something make them happy and keep busy like gardning, reading ,watching live games .It will help to pass time so they not feel alone or useless.

It is good for everyone to have hobbies.At all atages of life they play different roles and help folks .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you agree that people at every life stage benefit from having a hobby, and you address children, young adults, working people and retirees. The examples—such as drawing, hockey, reading and gardening—make the discussion relevant. This meets the task well, but the support is uneven: the points about children and working adults include several benefits, while the young-adult and retired sections rely more on broad claims. For instance, the hockey example suggests a possible career outcome but does not explain how a hobby benefits young adults more generally. To strengthen the response, develop each group’s main benefit with a clearer explanation or a specific example, and make the concluding position slightly more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it moves through the different age groups and ends by restating your opinion. Paragraphing helps distinguish the discussion of children and young adults from that of working people and retirees. You also use signposts such as “For example,” “Apart from that” and “Last but not least.” However, some transitions feel mechanical, and the opening and conclusion are very brief. Within paragraphs, several ideas are joined in long sequences, so the relationship between a claim and its explanation is not always easy to follow. For example, the shift from children’s hobbies to young adults comes abruptly. Use clearer topic sentences and vary linking methods, while separating distinct examples and explanations into more manageable sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “stress,” “anxiety,” “focus” and “physical health,” and you provide a range of hobby examples. However, the vocabulary is limited in precision, and noticeable spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include “atages,” “gardning,” “constr ate” (intended as “concentrate”) and “good dirction.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “find their motive in those fields” and “find way of living.” Aim to learn accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “develop a sense of purpose” or “maintain social connections” would help explain the benefits without relying on general wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if they have anything like reading… they can stand again” and clauses explaining benefits. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement and punctuation sometimes make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “if they good hobbies it not only give them” is missing a verb and has agreement problems; “if infants start running on their daily bases, it is good” also has an unclear grammatical relationship. Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation. Practise building complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and sentence boundaries. Accurate simple sentences will make your more complex ideas easier to understand.

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