Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is very vital to have at least a hobby to persue during our free time for each age group. As we all are busy with our daily task, wether, studing, working, playing, doing house hold chores, after doing all of this we get fatigue at some point due to which we loose intrest to persue a hobby or we forget to enoy our lives.

Moreover, we are living in a moredern word, in which everything look so demading and we hardly get some free time to enjoy our day or we mostly just waist our free time by using social Media.Instead we should try to enage in some fun, social and productive activities which makes our lives happier. For instance, Due to my work schedule and work pressure most of the time I feel tired stress ful and dont really feel to socialise some one, I feel less productive and depress, On the other hand I like to enoy my free time, by indulging in some fun, or relaxing activities, such as when I feel low duing the day because of any surcumtanmces, and I step out to go to gym and go to park for walk or run, after I relaise more i have more energy to do my tasks, my mood improve, and most importantly I feel happy.

To put in a nut shell, I recommend everyone to have atleast one hobby which can help individual to boos their energy, mood change and think postive. Additionally, some time hobbies chnages into passion and after profession, their there are many people out their whose started persuing singing, painting, dancing as their hobbies but after contenuing their intrest for long time they become professional, dancers, singers and painters.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you believe everyone should have a hobby, and you give relevant reasons, including relaxation, improved mood and the possibility of turning an interest into a profession. The personal example about going to the gym or walking in the park helps explain how hobbies can reduce stress and restore energy. This addresses the task, but the age groups named in the prompt are not considered separately, and the benefits for children, young adults and retired people remain general. The final point about hobbies becoming careers is relevant but would be stronger with a specific example or explanation. Develop these ideas further and connect them more directly to different stages of life.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces your opinion, explains the value of hobbies, gives a personal example and ends with a recommendation. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “For instance” and “On the other hand” show an effort to guide the reader. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some features of stronger progression. However, the long example moves through several ideas—work pressure, socialising, exercise, energy and mood—without clear sentence boundaries, so the relationships become harder to follow. Some transitions, especially “On the other hand,” do not express a clear contrast. Organise the example into shorter steps and use connectors that accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “work pressure,” “productive,” “relaxing activities” and “passion,” and the reader can generally understand your main points. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, sometimes making the message harder to read. Examples include “persue,” “fatigue,” “waist” and “surcumtanmces”; the intended words appear to be “pursue,” “fatigued,” “waste” and “circumstances.” There are also awkward combinations such as “boost their energy, mood change” and “think positive.” Build a more accurate range of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise phrasing would make your ideas clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “As we all are busy” and a longer example describing how exercise affects your mood. This shows an effort to connect ideas rather than relying only on short statements. However, some sentences are difficult to control, particularly the extended sentence beginning “For instance, Due to my work schedule,” which contains several clauses without clear punctuation. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “activities which makes our lives happier” and “I feel less productive and depress.” The conclusion’s “their there are many people” also disrupts the sentence. Practise building complex sentences with clear clause boundaries, and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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