Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this fast paced era, everyone is surviving their hectic life, most of the time individuals are busy to get their bread and butter. People of all age groups as children and adults are in their stuies and tuitions however sometimes we have to spend a time when we do not have to do anything so in such situtaion to spend our time productively we all need to have some or atleast one hobby. I highly believe that people of all age groups should have a hobby to do in their free time or to make themselves happy.

Initially, do not matter if there is a child, adult, working individual or a retired person, all must have keen intrest in someting that makes them rejuvenat while performin g that activity. i am agree that if their is a kid or child most of the time they are busy in their studies, tuition or school activities however once a while they could feel bordem from their sam everyday schedule, in such circumstances if they presuit a hobby they can perform it to make themselves fresh and energetic.

Additionally, an accident could happen on work that could make a person do bedrest or resist them to continue their work or job. In such time to get rid of bordem for instance if a person has hobby to read books, he or she can read books while on bed. Especially for retired or old age people, it is really hard to spend their time at home as they rearly have someone to talk with or spend time, as in today`s life people have no time for others. If they have specific interest of doing something then they do not need to find someone to soend time with eventhough they can do their hobbies and spend with with themsleves and not feel alone.

in conclusion, i think it is indeed important to have a hobby for everyone to keep themselves busy and involves in something.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you strongly believe people of every age should have a hobby, and you address children, working adults and retired people. The examples about a child feeling tired of a routine and someone reading during bed rest are relevant and help explain how hobbies can provide enjoyment or relieve boredom. The point about older people feeling lonely also supports your view. However, some parts are more fully explained than others: the working-person example focuses on an accident and recovery rather than the broader value of hobbies in ordinary working life. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation of its benefits, and add a specific example of a hobby and its effect. This would make the support more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your opinion, the body paragraphs give reasons and examples, and the conclusion restates your view. Sequencing words such as “Initially,” “Additionally,” and “in conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and the first body paragraph combines several points in a long sentence, making the relationship between the ideas less clear. References such as “in such time” and “with them” are also not always precise. Organise each paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it in a few shorter sentences. Use linking phrases to show the actual relationship between ideas rather than relying mainly on formulaic markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “hectic life,” “free time,” “rejuvenate,” and “retired,” and your meaning is generally understandable. There is also an attempt to vary expression when discussing boredom, energy and loneliness. However, noticeable spelling errors and inaccurate word choices reduce precision, for example “stuies,” “situtaion,” “bordem,” and “presuit.” Some combinations are unnatural, such as “get their bread and butter” in this context and “perform a hobby.” These issues make the vocabulary seem less controlled and can slow the reader. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases; for example, say “take up a hobby” or “pursue an interest” rather than “perform a hobby.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “however,” “if,” and “as,” and you communicate the main argument despite some grammatical errors. However, several sentences are difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear punctuation or correct structure. For example, “Initially, do not matter if there is a child…” lacks a clear subject and verb pattern, while “i am agree” uses an incorrect verb construction. There are also errors in articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “a person has hobby” and the long sentence beginning “Especially for retired or old age people.” Practise building accurate sentences first, then combine them with subordinate clauses; check capitalisation and punctuation when editing.

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