Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Hobby is a thing or outfeet that we are always happy to engage in. It varies from age to age, gender, colour, and religious upbringing

For me, having at least one hubby for children, young adults, working people, and the retired is most ideal.Since these hubbies ranges from idoor game, to outdoor games, to reading, listening to music and even travelling. These activities will enhance the effective and efficient blood circulation that ineeded for a healthy and balanced body metabolism.

It is also of note that activities like reading, and travelling is part of education, it avails one the opportunity to bo exposed, inlightened , and grounded on information that could not be possible to acquire ordinarily. These therefore have added to one's education outside of the classroom

iIn the same vain , at the case of a health challenge, especially where someone is confined to a limited environment with a contiousness challenge, it becomes impossible to participate in any kind of hobby. These limitations makes it impossible for all age categorise to have any hobby

In conclusion it is very important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hubby. these activities will enhance their phisical well being. It is even being recommended by medical practitioners. You will agree with me that it is expedient for people of all worth of life to have at least one hubby keep the body and soul

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

Your position is clear: you believe people of all ages should have a hobby, and you give relevant reasons involving physical well-being and learning. However, the response addresses the task only partially because these ideas are asserted rather than explained with specific examples, and the point about people with health challenges shifts toward exceptions without clarifying how it affects your overall opinion. The conclusion repeats the main claim but ends with an incomplete thought. The response contains 216 words, so it is 34 words below the 250-word minimum; the 24 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To develop the response, explain how a particular hobby benefits a group and add a relevant example, while making your position on exceptions clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening, supporting paragraphs, a paragraph about health limitations, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “For me,” “These therefore,” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression is uneven: the health-challenge paragraph introduces a qualification that is not connected clearly to the main argument, and the final sentence trails off, leaving the conclusion incomplete. Some connections are also mechanical or unclear, particularly “in the same vain” and “These therefore have added to one's education.” Use topic sentences to show each paragraph’s role, connect the qualification explicitly to your opinion, and ensure each sentence completes its thought.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “blood circulation,” “body metabolism,” “education,” and “medical practitioners.” These choices show an attempt to discuss benefits beyond simply naming hobbies. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent enough to distract the reader: “outfeet,” “hubby/hubbies,” “idoor,” “inlightened,” and “phisical” obscure or weaken meaning. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “all worth of life” and “part of education.” Check spelling carefully and choose precise, conventional expressions—for example, “people from all walks of life” and “broaden one’s knowledge.” Avoid repeating “hubby”; use “hobby” consistently, and vary it with “leisure activity” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including the sentence beginning “Since these hobbies range…” and the explanation of how reading and travelling can provide learning opportunities. However, several sentences are incomplete or have faulty structure, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. “Since these hubbies ranges…” is a dependent clause without a main clause, while “These limitations makes it impossible…” has a subject–verb agreement error. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and punctuation, as in “activities like reading, and travelling is part of education.” Build complete sentences, check that subjects and verbs agree, and use commas and full stops to separate ideas clearly. A careful edit for sentence boundaries would improve accuracy.

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