Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is necessary for Teens, youngsters, people who are employee, and aged people must have at least one hobby. It is must for their mental health and keep their body health and Hobbies must vary according to age. It also help them to improve social skills.

Firstly, I believe people who are in their young age should participate at least in one hobby, which helps them to know what they are capable of, in these stressful days. For example Children having stress of studies like exams, assignment and other related tasks. whereas working people having stress of managing work schedule along with their personal life. However, playing sports and participating in indoor activity can help them to get rid of stressful situations and can make them feel active. Older people or retired people may feel boredom in their home, adapting hobbies can help to destroy their boredom. To extend this statement, retired people can stay at home can do cooking and cooking, which can kill their boredom.

Secondly, adapting hobbies can improve individuals social connections or skills and can help to develop meaningful relationship. For instance, children who participate in playing sports can improve their social communications and can gain confidence likewise, young adults can get their practical skills developed and can better at their other related task. Moreover, older people can go outside at park for walking can meet other people which in result, they can feel connected with society and never feel alone, and also young adult should have learn musical instruments and can learn singing, which can support them in their career.

In conclusion, I am totally agree with this statement, children, youngsters and retired individual should have participate in one skillful hobbies which could help them to find the reason to live a life .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that people of different ages should have a hobby, and you give relevant reasons, including stress relief, reduced boredom and stronger social connections. The examples about children managing exam pressure, workers balancing work and personal life, and older people meeting others while walking address the task well. However, the age groups and benefits are not developed equally. The point that hobbies help young adults discover their abilities is introduced but not explained, while the claim that music could support a young adult’s career feels less connected to your main reasons. Develop each example by showing more specifically how a hobby produces the stated benefit, and keep the discussion focused on the strongest supporting points.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs organised around benefits, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow. Within paragraphs, however, connections are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, “To extend this statement” does not clearly introduce the cooking example, and the long sentence beginning “Moreover, older people…” combines several different age groups and ideas, making the relationships harder to track. Some references, such as “which” in the opening, also have an unclear antecedent. Use shorter sentences when moving between age groups, and connect each example explicitly to the benefit it illustrates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “stressful situations,” “social connections,” “meaningful relationship,” and “confidence.” These choices help communicate your main ideas, but the range and control are limited, with repeated or imprecise expressions that sometimes make the meaning awkward. For instance, “destroy their boredom” is not a natural collocation, “feel boredom” is less idiomatic than “feel bored,” and “youngsters” is repeated alongside “young adults” and “Teens.” There are also word-form and phrasing problems in expressions such as “skillful hobbies.” Aim for precise, natural collocations and vary repeated terms; the suggestions below offer alternatives that fit your intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “which,” “whereas,” and “who,” and the overall meaning is generally recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure and verb forms occur across the response and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “It is must for their mental health,” “It also help them,” and “I am totally agree,” where the verb patterns or agreement are incorrect. The sentence beginning “Older people or retired people may feel boredom…” also shifts into an incomplete construction: “adapting hobbies can help…” does not connect grammatically to the opening clause. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete sentence patterns, and verb forms, then check long sentences for clear clause boundaries and punctuation.

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