Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

I believe that children, young adults, working people and the retired should have hobbies even if it is one hobby. In my opinon, Hobbies are that motivation for all of us to do our boring tasks and life duties.

Discovering your hobbies are starting at an earlier stage when we are kids. Parents start to explore with their children what they are like to do as a hobby and work to develop these hobbies with their childrens. I believe this impacts children's character as it begin to build confidence and sometime competition as well.

By time when they reach teenager phase, they become so busy with their interesting hobby other than spend time suffering the internet with no reason. I believe this is one of the critical phases that sharpen their characters and direct them towards a better life.

For working people, I think hobbies are a way to escape from work stress and life duities and enjoy the life. For me, running, as my hobby, is my therapy when I feel stressed, disappointed or less motivated. It also gives me the motivation to resist the daily work stress. when I feel down, I go for a run in fresh air, relief all stress, nervous and return in a good mood.

Regarding retired people, I believe hobbies are as important as any other phase. When people got retired, they usually exit most of their routine and become less busy. If they don't have hobbies, they become more vulnerable to depression. On the other hand, I believe retirement is a good chance to return to slow life and enjoy things that you're really like.

In conclusion, hobbies have benefits for all people across all ages. As a result, I believe they are very important for all people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you believe hobbies benefit people at every age, and you return to this view in the conclusion. You address children, teenagers, working people and retirees, giving relevant reasons such as confidence-building, avoiding unproductive internet use, managing work stress and reducing vulnerability to depression. The personal example of running also supports your argument effectively. These points are extended enough to make the response persuasive, although some claims remain broad—for example, that hobbies direct teenagers “towards a better life” is not explained in detail. To strengthen the response further, develop one or two examples more specifically and clarify how the benefits differ across age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your opinion, separate paragraphs discuss different age groups, and a conclusion restates the main view. The progression from childhood to retirement is easy to follow, and phrases such as “For working people,” “Regarding retired people,” and “On the other hand” help signal shifts and relationships between ideas. The personal example is also placed logically within the paragraph about workers. Some links between sentences are less smooth, however, and the repeated use of “I believe” makes the development somewhat predictable. Aim to vary how you connect and introduce ideas, and make references such as “these hobbies” more precise where needed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to discuss the topic across different life stages, including relevant expressions such as “work stress,” “build confidence,” “vulnerable to depression” and “return to slow life.” The personal example also gives you a chance to use topic-specific language. However, several noticeable word-choice, collocation and spelling problems reduce precision: “suffering the internet” does not express the intended idea, “life duities” is misspelled, and “things that you're really like” is not a natural phrase. “Less motivated” and “good mood” are understandable but general. Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships and checking spelling and word forms; this will make your meaning more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “when,” “if” and “as,” and most of your ideas remain understandable. There are, however, recurring errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. For example, “Discovering your hobbies are starting” has an unclear subject and verb pattern, while “what they are like to do” and “when people got retired” use incorrect structures or tense. In “when I feel down, I go for a run in fresh air, relief all stress,” the final clause needs a grammatical verb form and clearer sentence structure. Review subject–verb agreement, tense consistency and article use, then proofread each sentence for a complete, correctly formed clause.

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