Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

My Name is John, and i am writing to bring to your attention that an international flight is missed by me due to some issues at the airport.

While I frequently travel globally, this time I missed my flight due to multiple reason. There was an technical error in the airline application. As a result, i could not check-in online. Moreover, there was too much hustle and bustle at the air airport, which not only impacted the check-in departed, but the baggage submission process as well. At the end, the office at the security check wasted my so much time to verify my all the cell phone and other electronic items, and when i arrived at gate, the flight already had taken off.

I was travelling from Delhi to Toronto for my higher education. Now i missed my flight due to such issues, will leave a negative impact on my academics. My classes are almost about to begin within a week, please reschedule my flight as a direct stop in Toronto at a very reasonable price as soon as possible. Alternatively, refund my money with adding some additional funds in the total price.

I hope you will consider this matter seriously and take the necessary steps to resolve my challenge with in the time period.

Your faithfully,

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for an opinion on the importance of hobbies for different age groups, but the student has written a formal letter of complaint regarding a missed flight. Because the response does not address the task prompt at all, it fails to meet the requirements of the task. Additionally, the response is 220 words, which is below the 250-word minimum requirement. This results in a significant penalty for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter follows a standard formal structure with a salutation, body paragraphs, and a sign-off. However, the logical progression is limited by the fact that the content is irrelevant to the prompt. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'As a result', but they are applied to a narrative that does not answer the question. Paragraphing is present, but the overall coherence is undermined by the complete mismatch between the task instructions and the content provided.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is generally functional but limited in range. There are several awkward collocations and errors, such as 'check-in departed' and 'wasted my so much time'. The student uses some appropriate phrases like 'hustle and bustle' and 'negative impact', but these are insufficient to demonstrate a higher level of lexical control. The vocabulary is repetitive and lacks the sophistication required for higher band scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The writing contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the flow of the text. Examples include 'i am writing' (lowercase 'i'), 'multiple reason' (should be plural), 'an technical error' (should be 'a'), and 'verify my all the cell phone'. There is a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. The errors are frequent enough to cause some strain on the reader, though the general meaning remains understandable.

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