Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.
What's your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
having a hobby is essential in every age group. hobbies helps people to stays active and motivated.its utilize you time in good way either is sports or reading books in free time although i am agree that hobby helps you to make your mind relax and less stressful in every stage of your life.
if we talk about children or young adults who is in 20s they have more energy to play sports ,music arts or any powerful activity and at in this ages children or young generation moreover they have ability to adjust with other people and make mind connection, teamwork, discipline, creativity. for example a child who plays football learns cooperation and resilience from losing/winning; an instrument builds patience and fine motor skills.
then working people they are facing some issues like managing the time or facing stressful office days although they continue with hobbies he or she feels less stressful, mentality relax moreover they are more focus on their work
last the retired or old age persons, retirement loss the structure and purpose of living but at that moment hobby helps them to fill the gap they are busy with their activity like gardening,cooking or anything they are doing its helps to make them active and fresh they have hope to lived happily with hobbies
in colension, whether developing the skill or mind connection in childhood , facing stressful or struggle phase in office years as adult or maintaining purpose in retirement hobbies contribute a lot in every stage group of life i have strongly believe every person should be encouraged to Chase at least one hobby throughout your life
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing the importance of hobbies for children, working adults, and the retired. The position is clear throughout, and the ideas are relevant to each age group. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the section on working people mentions stress but lacks a concrete example or a more detailed explanation of how a hobby specifically mitigates this. While the response is sufficient to cover the topic, it would benefit from more depth and specific, well-integrated examples to reach a higher band. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces the writer's stance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific age group. There is a clear progression of ideas from childhood to retirement. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'if we talk about' and 'then working people' are somewhat informal and repetitive. There are also issues with referencing and sentence-level transitions, such as the abrupt start to the paragraph about retired persons. While the overall structure is coherent, the lack of sophisticated linking words and occasional awkward phrasing limits the flow of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'resilience', 'cooperation', and 'fine motor skills'. However, there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'its utilize you time' instead of 'it utilizes your time' and 'mentality relax' instead of 'mentally relaxed'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and the repetition of basic words like 'hobby' and 'stressful' suggests a need for more variety and precision to convey ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('hobbies helps'), incorrect pronoun usage ('its utilize you time'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the text from achieving a higher score. More attention to proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy is essential.
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