Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.
What's your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is argued that having one hobby such as dancing, singing, newspaper reading and so on for children, adults, employees and the elderly people is significant. This essay agrees with this statement because it is one the best ways to utilise the spare time and also it provides them a sense of satisfaction.
In terms of children and young people, having at least one favourite hobby can assist them to use their quality time
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, consisting of only 74 words. Consequently, the task is not fully addressed. The introduction provides a clear position, and the beginning of the first body paragraph attempts to address the prompt regarding children. However, because the essay is incomplete and stops abruptly, the ideas are severely underdeveloped, and the prompt is not fully explored for all the groups mentioned (young adults, working people, and the retired). This results in a failure to meet the basic requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is too short to demonstrate a coherent structure or effective paragraphing. While the opening sentence uses a cohesive device ('such as') and the introduction is logically linked to the prompt, the text ends mid-sentence. There is no opportunity to assess the use of linking words or the logical progression of ideas across a full essay. The limited text provided is grammatically linked, but the overall organization is non-existent due to the incomplete nature of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is functional and appropriate for the context, such as 'significant', 'utilise', and 'satisfaction'. However, the range is very limited due to the brevity of the text. There are no attempts at less common or sophisticated vocabulary that would demonstrate a higher level of lexical control. The language is accurate, but the lack of length prevents the demonstration of a wider range of vocabulary required for higher band scores.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The sentences produced are grammatically correct and show a basic control of structure. The writer uses a complex sentence in the introduction ('This essay agrees with this statement because it is one the best ways to utilise the spare time...'). However, the range of structures is extremely limited. Because the response is so short, it is impossible to evaluate the writer's ability to maintain accuracy across a variety of complex sentence forms or to assess the frequency of errors in a full-length essay.
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