Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

It has been often said that every individual should have at least a single hobby regardless of their age. This phenomenon has numerous reasons which will be discussed along with my opinion on this statement.

In my perspective, it is important to have a hobby because this will help people to improve quality of life. To be specific, taking part in activities like sports and games will not only improve physical well-being but also help to improve the ability to work in a team, especially for community under 20s. Additionally, adults and elders can take part in community services, where they can socialize and communicate with other citizens instead of feeling depressed at home due to workload and loneliness. For instance, many libraries organize events such as restocking books on shelves, older citizens can assist in such activities, where they can socialize with locals.

On the other hand, hobbies can improve skills. When an individual works consistently on one particular thing, they can master that activity. For instance, a person who lift weights on a daily basis in the gym, improves both their mobility and form of performing any exercise.

Another reason why citizens should prioritize hobbies is that they can divert their time in betterment rather than wasting it by using a phone. In other words, most of the people spend hours just by scrolling short videos on social media, whereas they can pursue hobbies like reading and writing which will improve academic knowledge of children and productivity of office goers at work. For example, scholars who study even after school hours often obtain better result in their examinations.

In conclusion, I believe that people who have hobbies become more socially active, knowledgeable and spend their time in better activities, which eventually improves their lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all parts of the prompt, covering the importance of hobbies for different age groups. Your position is clear throughout the essay. The ideas are relevant and supported by examples, such as the mention of library volunteering for the elderly and gym activities for physical health. To reach a higher band, ensure that your supporting points are fully extended; for instance, the link between hobbies and 'academic knowledge' could be explained with more depth regarding how specific hobbies (like reading) directly translate to cognitive benefits. Overall, the response is well-focused and directly answers the question.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'In my perspective', 'Additionally', 'On the other hand', and 'In other words' to guide the reader through your arguments. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate distinct ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be more fluid. For example, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother to better connect the concepts of social benefits and skill acquisition. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss the topic with precision. Phrases like 'socialize and communicate', 'master that activity', and 'divert their time' are used appropriately. There are some minor issues with collocation and word choice, such as 'community under 20s' (which is slightly unnatural) and 'a person who lift weights' (grammatical error affecting lexical accuracy). To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and idiomatic expressions. While your vocabulary is adequate for the task, expanding your range of topic-specific terminology would help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are recurring grammatical errors that slightly impede the flow. For example, 'a person who lift weights' should be 'lifts', and 'most of the people spend hours just by scrolling' is slightly awkward. Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article usage errors throughout the text (e.g., 'especially for community under 20s' should be 'the community'). You have a good grasp of basic grammar, but more consistent control over complex structures and error-free sentences is needed to reach the next band level.

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