Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is undeniable that having at least one hobby in life is crucial. Hobbies brings an excitemment in life, by working on hobbies, individuals from all ages can feel happines and can escape from social media, indoor games and lonliness. It can be beneficial, if someone adapt a hobby as their career such as photography, cooking and singing. I personally believe that hobbies plays an unseperable part in our life and gives us an opportunity to rewind after study or hectic day.

Hobbies can be beneficial in children life because children can prevent themselves from indoor games and screentime if their parents support them to build one hobby in their life and can become a social person instead of introvert. For example, hobby such as reading improves concentration, imagination and refine grammer and boost confidence, which would be helpful in their future and in their acedemic. Young adults can become successful, if they opted their hobby as a career in their life. For instance, photography, adults love taking pictures thesedays and have a great knowledge about editing because they usually edit pictures or videos to post on social media therefore, if they opt it as a career they can become a successful photographer which is highly demamded and highly paid job in contemporary era.

Due to the hectic lifestyle, working people get insufficient time for enjoyement. It would be proved benefited if they have one hobby because they can rewind after a tiring day by spending some time on hobby such as cooking because they will love to work with engredients and they can make home-made food that they less eat ought to busy lifestyle. It is not only crucial but beneficial if older citizens have a hobby that they do not look for copanion to spend a time with, they can prevent from lonliness and can feel close to nature if they have hobby such as gardening.

To conclude, its proven that hobbies gives a lead to our life and gives us chance to work on what we loves to do and can be commendably beneficial if one opt hobby as a career to become a successful person in his or her field.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing the importance of hobbies for children, young adults, working people, and the retired. The candidate establishes a clear position from the introduction and maintains it throughout the essay. Each demographic is given specific attention with relevant arguments and examples, such as mentioning reading for children, photography as a career for young adults, cooking for working people, and gardening for older citizens. While some of the supporting explanations are slightly repetitive or brief, the overall development satisfies the requirements for a Band 6.0 or solid Band 6.5. Ideas are extended, but a greater depth of analysis would push the response into higher band levels. Overall, the prompt is fully addressed with clear, relevant ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a clear overall progression and is divided into logical paragraphs that each address a different segment of the population mentioned in the prompt. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'For example,' 'therefore,' and 'To conclude.' However, some cohesion feels mechanical or repetitive, and referencing is occasionally faulty, such as 'they less eat ought to busy lifestyle' and minor issues with pronoun clarity. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related ideas together. The logical flow is generally easy to follow, supporting a Band 6.5 descriptor where organization is coherent overall despite some minor mechanical use of cohesive ties.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task, incorporating words and phrases like 'contemporary era,' 'insufficient time,' and 'engredients.' However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'excitemment,' 'happines,' 'lonliness,' 'unseperable,' 'grammer,' 'acedemic,' 'demamded,' 'enjoyement,' 'benefited,' and 'copanion.' Furthermore, some collocations are awkward, such as 'if someone adapt a hobby.' While the lexical range is adequate to convey meaning and communicate ideas clearly, the frequency of spelling and morphological errors prevents the score from reaching a Band 7.0, fitting comfortably within the Band 6.0 criteria.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and conditional structures (e.g., 'if their parents support them' and 'if they have hobby such as gardening'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement ('Hobbies brings,' 'hobbies plays'), missing articles ('in children life,' 'have hobby'), and awkward prepositional usage or word forms ('if one opt hobby'). While these errors do not impede overall communication—the meaning of the sentences remains clear—they occur frequently enough to preclude a higher band. The control of grammar aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor, where a mix of structures is used alongside persistent errors.

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