Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the 21st century, people have so much busy in their working schedule eg job and personal bussiness. the life is in the modern era is so stressful so keep one hobby is very impotant for everyone to spend the great time in thier life, will discuss in forthcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby in their life becasue now days the life is totally changed. The living cost of the life is rapidly increased. For example now days people dont have much time to keep thier self fresh and they should keep atleast one hobby to make themselfs comfortable. Secondly keeping one hobby is make the person socialise and they met many people through this activity. moreover this will helps to create a good bond in society.

I would say the age nunber is doesnt matter for keep one hobby in life, any one who might be child,adult or retired peron make one hobby to spend their free time with friends , in free time anyone can use there sapare time in useful way. by this practice we can discuss many ideas of life and present time situations. keeping one hobby also impotant to keep your health fit. many people now days make gym their hobby and they do the gym on regular basis and keep thier boy fir and healthy. on the other side few people choose indoor game hobbies to use there spare time like video game etc.

In last i would say in this busy hectic life keaping one hobby is so important for everyone. this will help them to utilised there time in well manner.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by giving a clear opinion that having a hobby is important for people of all ages, citing reasons such as reducing stress, socialising, and maintaining health. The student attempts to develop ideas, such as mentioning gym and video games, but some parts are repetitive and under-developed, relying on sweeping generalisations rather than deep exploration. The position is stated, though structural issues in the introduction initially obscure clarity. Overall, it satisfies the requirements for Band 6 because it directly addresses the prompt and presents relevant ideas, though the depth of support is somewhat limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response attempts a clear logical organisation, using paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, body points, and a brief conclusion. However, cohesive devices are often mechanical or misused, such as 'To commence with', 'Secondly', and 'In last i would say'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall progression feels slightly disjointed due to run-on sentences and a lack of smooth transitions between ideas. Paragraphing is present and used to group related concepts, but the intrusive and faulty use of cohesive links places this writing firmly at Band 5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic ideas about hobbies, stress, and daily schedules. However, there is a very limited range of less common lexical items, and frequent spelling errors ('bussiness', 'impotant', 'thier', 'becasue', 'now days', 'nunber', 'sapare', 'keaping', 'utilised') and word choice inaccuracies ('keep one hobby' instead of 'have a hobby') restrict the score. While the vocabulary is minimally sufficient to convey the writer's meaning, errors in spelling and collocation occasionally cause slight strain for the reader, aligning with Band 5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the life is in the modern era is so stressful', 'the age nunber is doesnt matter'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions ('do the gym'). Many sentences contain multiple structural errors or lack punctuation clarity ('people have so much busy in their working schedule eg job and personal bussiness'). Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, the response earns a 5.0 for grammar.

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