Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.
What's your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Hobbies play a significant role in an indivual's life. I think these are importal for all ages, including children, young adults, professionals and retired old people as well. This essay is highlighting the importance of having at least one hobby for all groups of ages.
First of all, I will discuss the the importance of hobbies for children. As technology is rising and everyone has smarphones, tablets and laptops etc,. Kids are spending huge time on these devices and getting edicted of those. Here the hobbies play a
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping abruptly at only 88 words. As a result, the task is addressed only minimally and remains severely underdeveloped. Although the writer introduces a clear position in the opening paragraph regarding the importance of hobbies for various age groups, the essay cuts off in the second paragraph before any arguments for working people or retired individuals can be presented. This severely restricts the development of ideas and results in a low band score under Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Due to the extreme brevity of the text, it is difficult to fully assess coherence and cohesion over an extended piece of writing. The writer attempts a logical introduction and uses a cohesive phrase 'First of all,' to begin the body paragraph. However, because the text cuts off mid-sentence ('Here the hobbies play a...'), paragraphing and overall progression cannot be properly established. The organizational structure is incomplete, limiting the score to a Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a minimally adequate vocabulary range with some attempts at less common words, such as 'significant role', 'professionals', and 'retired old people'. However, there are notable spelling and typographical errors, including 'indivual' instead of 'individual' and 'importal' instead of 'important', along with lexical slips like 'edicted' instead of 'addicted'. These errors reflect a limited control of word choice and spelling, placing the response in the Band 5 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text displays a mix of simple and emerging complex sentence forms, such as 'As technology is rising and everyone has smarphones...'. There are several grammatical and mechanical inaccuracies, including punctuation errors like 'etc,.' and spelling issues in the phrase 'smarphones'. Because the writing is so short, the sample of grammar is limited, but the presence of noticeable errors within a very brief text points to a Band 5 level of grammatical control.
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