Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In every lifetime or lifestyle to enjoy your work and all kind of aera is important to what you like to do as enjoy and relax your daily life or routines to work and relationships handles is significantly more important what you want to relaxtions and what you like to do as freely thats called 'hobby' right.

It is usually for children,young adults,working people and the retired also important to at least in daily or lifetime one hobby. when you children is enjoy your life the way like go with flow parents are most significantly divert there chidren to direct they enjoy what there children like to do. If they enjoy dancing they pursuing there chidren in to join the dance classes . Because of the children more focus on dance and they enjoy and like the dancing might be in before 15 years latter If there intrest in same hobby or enjoy dance so there children convert there hobby into career of teaching in the dance classes. so its usually all of the age kind of hobbys is important.

The young adult they busying all day in study , collages,classes or tution so there daily life also singificantly role created the freshness and relaxtion of the life of daily rutines. And other kind where you are working some were so its important how you spend your me time and your hobby or enjoy the life becase of the work some time is hectic all in days .so they also need in life at lest one hobby in their life. Next is the retired people they also do what there young days life they enjoy and recall all the way they enjoy becase of they have much not do and they some kind of not the pupose of life they enjoy so they feel boredom in life thats why its imoprtant at least one hobby to enjoy the life .

My opinion is that atleast in lifetime all age is matter one hobby to enjoy daily life and give your hobby atleast one hour in days or weekend or monthly 1 day because you need to feel motivation relaxtion stress free life enjoy life part and moments with your own self its very imporatant.

The main resons is important to daily hectic life to need body and brain convert some time of daily routines. In my own knowledge my hobby in my childhood is dancing in cuture semi classical and don't much time for that but i have decided give my hobby for time at least one hour in month and i enjoy my life daily routines.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing the importance of hobbies across different age groups (children, young adults, working people, and the retired) and provides a clear personal opinion. Ideas are generally relevant, such as mentioning how children develop careers from hobbies, how young adults and workers need relief from hectic routines, and how retirees combat boredom. However, the development of these ideas is frequently hindered by unclear phrasing and a lack of precise support. For instance, the discussion on children and careers is somewhat muddled. Consequently, the response aligns best with a Band 5, as the task is addressed, but the ideas remain limited, under-developed, and occasionally confusing to follow.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is organized into paragraphs, each generally dedicated to a different group mentioned in the prompt, which provides a basic overall structure. However, the logical progression between sentences is frequently broken due to poor cohesive devices and abrupt shifts in thought. For example, transitions like 'Next is the retired people' and 'My opinion is that atleast' are very mechanical and basic. Furthermore, referencing is often unclear, as seen in pronouns like 'they' and 'there' being used ambiguously throughout the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. These features place the response firmly at Band 4.5 to 5.0; let us award a Band 5.0 for the discernible paragraph structure and attempt at grouping ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is limited and heavily restricted by frequent errors in word choice, form, and collocation. The student uses basic vocabulary and attempts less common items, but these attempts often result in unnatural phrasing, such as 'lifestyle to enjoy your work and all kind of aera', 'relationships handles', and 'busyting all day'. There are also numerous spelling and morphological errors, such as 'aera', 'relaxtions', 'collages', 'singificantly', 'becase', and 'imoprtant'. While the writer manages to convey the general topic of hobbies and stress relief, the high frequency of lexical errors causes considerable difficulty for the reader, matching the descriptors for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is very weak. The text is plagued by severe run-on sentences, missing verbs, and pervasive structural errors, such as 'when you children is enjoy your life the way like go with flow' and 'the young adult they busying all day in study'. Subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and preposition usage are faulty throughout almost every sentence. Because errors are extremely frequent and often distort the intended meaning, forcing the reader to guess the logic, the response meets the criteria for a Band 4.0 in grammatical range and accuracy.

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