Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

All people have different hobbies, according to their taste like some like read books, listening music but others like singning, dancing. It depends on their interest and nature. To be a hobby, is very essential for everyone such as kids, older people, workholic. I am exteremly agree with this statement because of some reasons like can be perfect in something, valuable and useful in free time except other things. Now, I will expain all these causes in upcoming paragraphs.

Firstly, all should have at least one hobby to be perfect. If individuals are very good in something they can get more opportunties like some fields singing, dancing. Due to this, they can get fame and if people to read books, so they can easily read anything without feel hasitation in front of others. For example, Nowadays children take part in many competions and win if they have interest in that particular game or something else. So, It is very beneficial to have one better hobby.

Futhermore, another reason is to do intersting things in free time would be significant for people. There are many things done by individuals in their free time such as busy people like to do jogging, walking, meditation to relax their mind from busy life. Additionally, Seniors can go to parks, public places as some of them like to visit new places which could be enjoyable for them. They can get a break from their boring lives by spending their precious time with their loved ones and friends. Therefore, being interest in anything is a positive side that helps to people live longer.

To conclude, being a hobby is very good thing that helps to develop some skills reading, dancing, singing and with these everyone can enjoy their free time very simply. This could be a better thing to improve our lives and make more beautifiul.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion on whether children, young adults, working people, and retirees should have at least one hobby, and supports this position with reasons and examples. The student successfully identifies how hobbies benefit different age groups, such as relaxation for busy workers and enjoyment for seniors. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, with over-generalized statements like "they can get fame." While the prompt's requirements are met and all parts are addressed, the arguments would benefit from greater depth and more precise explanations. Overall, the task response aligns well with the Band 5 descriptor criteria.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which provides a basic overall arrangement. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward transitions and mechanical cohesive devices, such as "Firstly, all should have..." and "Futhermore, another reason is...". Referencing is occasionally unclear, and sentences within paragraphs do not always flow smoothly together. While paragraphing is used, the lack of sophisticated cohesive devices and occasional disjointed phrasing place this performance squarely within Band 5.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for communicating basic ideas, but the range is quite limited and repetitive. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as "workholic" (misspelled) and "exteremly," but these attempts are marred by frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as "singning," "expain," "competions," and "intersting." Phrasing such as "being a hobby is very good thing" demonstrates a lack of flexibility and precision. Although the reader can generally understand the intended meaning, the noticeable errors in word formation and collocation prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the response, such as missing articles ("listen to music", "read books"), incorrect verb forms ("people to read books"), and awkward phrasing ("helps to people live longer"). Punctuation and capitalization errors also appear regularly. While the writer attempts a variety of sentence structures, the high frequency of grammatical inaccuracies causes some difficulty and distraction for the reader, fitting the Band 5 descriptors.

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