Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemporary days, people are often busy wiin their schedule and they do not have time for themselves owing to this it is compulsory for all humun beings such as younsters, working class along with stopping work to have at least one hobby. In this eassy I will give my opinion with relevant examples.

To start with, there are plenty of positive thoughts among upcoming phenomenon. Firstly, build good career in their life. To be more precise, in these modern days, numerous individuals show their interest in games such as cricket, soccer, basketball and win diverse medals. And some players got jobs in their fileds. To cite an example, an article published by famous newspaper The Hindustan Timelines in 2022 revealed that around 88% players are earning good salaries and enjoy their happy life.

Secondly, stay away from loneliness. More specifically, if individuals have ay kinds of hobby in their life then they can spend their time in a smooth manner such as magnitude of women have hobbies of painting, drawing, stiching and so on. During their maternity leave, if hard for women to do some strength works so if they have any hobbies then they can spend their time in a good way along with take care of their baby.

To conclude, In my view of prospective, having a one hobby or more plays a crucial roles in everyone life as by this human-being not only gain knowledge, learn new skills but also sharp their cognitive and mental skills too.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by expressing an opinion on the importance of hobbies for different age groups and provides some relevant examples. However, the development of ideas is limited and sometimes unclear. For instance, the first body paragraph attempts to explain how hobbies help build a good career, but the argument transitions abruptly into professional sports players earning salaries, which only partially addresses the broader concept of everyday hobbies for working people and retirees. The second body paragraph mentions staying away from loneliness and provides a convoluted example about women on maternity leave doing hobbies, but the explanation remains superficial and under-developed. Furthermore, the position is not always clearly sustained throughout, leading to a partial fulfillment of the task requirements where some ideas are presented without sufficient extension or support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic organization to the essay with a clear introduction and conclusion, and the response is divided into paragraphs. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression throughout the body. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inaccurately, such as the repetitive use of transition markers like 'To start with', 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'To conclude'. Referencing is also faulty at times, making the logical relationships between sentences strained. For example, the sentence starting with 'owing to this it is compulsory...' creates a confusing logical leap right at the beginning of the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within the paragraphs is weak, meaning ideas do not flow smoothly from one point to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical resource is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The vocabulary used is often basic and repetitive, and there are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of lexical errors include spelling mistakes like 'wiin' instead of 'with', 'humun' instead of 'human', 'eassy' instead of 'essay', 'fileds' instead of 'fields', 'ay' instead of 'any', and 'stiching' instead of 'stitching'. Furthermore, awkward collocations and word choices appear throughout the text, such as 'contemporary days', 'strength works', and 'view of prospective', which restrict the precision and flexibility of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing displays a limited range of structures, with mostly simple sentences and frequent attempts at complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There are frequent grammatical errors in verb forms, tense consistency, prepositions, and article usage which can cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'In this contemporary days' (preposition and plural agreement error), 'people are often busy wiin their schedule' (preposition error), 'it is compulsory for all humun beings such as younsters, working class along with stopping work' (faulty parallel structure and awkward phrasing), and 'if hard for women to do some strength works' (missing subject and incorrect article/adjective combination). Punctuation errors, such as run-on sentences lacking appropriate separation or conjunctions, also persist throughout the response.

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