Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In todays fast changing world, time is moving quickly that people do not have a moment for themselves to relax. Consequently, it is important for children, young adults,working people and retired person to have a hobby.

People can choose a hobby which will help them to relax during a moment of physical and mental strain. It could be football, swimming, walking in a park or even reading a novel. What is important is how the person feel after doing it.

Nowadays many researches have proved hobby as a means to remain healthy. This enables the mind to be diverted from what it has been doing for a moment. For example, swimming is a very good hobby as well as a good sports. A swimmer feels so relaxed after a swimming session and at the same time it is good for health.

In my opinion, I consider a hobby as an excellent time passing. A child instead of wasting his focus on the mobile phone, could spent some quality moment in an activity and benefit from its goodness. The old people to avoid alzheimer, a hobby will help them to pass the day in a positive mood and forget about their worries.

To conclude, a hobby is essential for the well-being of people whether it is young or old ones.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you believe hobbies are important, and you give relevant reasons, including relaxation, health, and keeping children and older people occupied. The examples of swimming and a child choosing an activity instead of using a phone help address the question. However, several points are asserted rather than explained—for instance, the claim that hobbies help older people avoid Alzheimer’s needs careful qualification and support. The response also does not meet the 250-word minimum: it contains 210 words, and the 10 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each reason with a fuller explanation or a specific example, and make your view apply more explicitly to all the groups named in the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs about relaxation and health, a paragraph giving your opinion, and a conclusion. This makes the main line of thought reasonably easy to follow. You also use basic links such as “Consequently,” “For example,” and “To conclude.” However, progression between ideas is sometimes abrupt: the discussion moves from general health benefits to children and older people without clearly connecting these examples to the earlier points. Some references, such as “This” in the health paragraph, are not fully precise. Use clearer topic sentences and link each example directly to the reason it supports; this would make the organisation more consistently logical and the cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your main ideas, including “physical and mental strain,” “relaxed,” “well-being,” and “positive mood.” There is also some variety in the activities and age groups mentioned. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations sound unnatural or imprecise, such as “time passing,” “a good sports,” and “many researches.” “Retired person” is also an awkward way to refer to the group. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding your overall message, but they reduce precision. Build a wider set of natural expressions for discussing leisure, health, and age groups, and check whether nouns are countable and whether common word combinations sound idiomatic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including “A child instead of wasting his focus on the mobile phone, could spent…” and the sentence beginning “The old people to avoid…”. These attempts show an effort to express more than basic statements, but complex constructions are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. For example, “time is moving quickly that people do not have” needs a clearer clause structure, while “could spent” uses the wrong verb form and “What is important is how the person feel” has an agreement error. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and punctuation. Practise building accurate clauses first, then combine them using structures such as “because,” “although,” and “which.”

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