Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.
What's your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Crutial to have a Hobby for all, no matter in which age group you fall. As per this question i am going to writer an easy on my opinion, Yes at least one or multiple hobbies a person should have. Reason for that, to stay healthy, active and physically strong.
To Begin with, The first and formost reason which helps me to get strongly agree on this term is Health, It is a root of a human body and how this is a root let me explain it to you all. Well, playing cricket, football, running and yoga all are the examples of hobby. Meanwhile, preforming all at least one's a day make person's body fit even mentally too. It helps indiviual to think positive about his life especially in today's world where majority of population have stress about future, which is completely unpredictable.
In addition to this, Greatest thing about hobby is it make people more attractive and sharpe minded by nature. For instance, people who play chess as a hobby game are the perfect for this bullet point or example. Moreover, who have hobby to play phisical activity games like Cricket, Basket ball and many more are always stay fit and having great stamina in compare to those who don't like outdoor games.
In conclusion, I found this statement completely right, indiviual must adopt at least single hobby to stay healthy, happy and positive in terms of living life while creating fantastic memories and mentioning agian that age is just a number in this living world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
Your position is clear: you agree that people of every age should have a hobby, and you give relevant reasons, including physical health, mental wellbeing and positive thinking. The examples of sport, yoga and chess help illustrate these points. However, the response only partly develops the task: the discussion focuses mainly on health and fitness, while the benefits for children, working people and retired people are not explained separately or supported with specific examples. The claim that hobbies make people “more attractive” is also introduced without explanation. To strengthen the response, develop each main reason with a clear explanation and a concrete example, and show how hobbies can benefit people at different stages of life.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “To Begin with,” “In addition to this” and “In conclusion” make the stages of the argument easy to identify. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes uneven: the first body paragraph moves from physical health to mental positivity without clearly connecting the ideas, and the second shifts from attractiveness to chess and then outdoor sports. Some transitions feel mechanical, and references such as “this bullet point” are not clear or natural in an essay. Organise each paragraph around one main benefit, then explain and exemplify it in sequence. This would make the argument flow more smoothly and reduce abrupt shifts.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “physically strong,” “unpredictable,” “stamina” and “fantastic memories,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “hobby,” “people” and “healthy,” while several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less precise. Examples include “Crutial,” “formost,” “indiviual,” “phisical” and “sharpe minded.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “agree on this term” and “perfect for this bullet point.” Aim to learn accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions for different benefits of hobbies would help you communicate your ideas more clearly and flexibly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors in sentence formation, agreement and verb forms occur often enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “Crutial to have a Hobby for all” is a fragment, while “it make people more attractive” lacks subject–verb agreement. In “playing … make person's body fit,” the subject and verb do not agree, and “who have hobby … are always stay fit” combines verb forms incorrectly. Work on complete sentence patterns, articles and agreement, and read each sentence aloud to check that its subject and verb fit. Using a few accurate complex sentences would also improve control.
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