Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In morden rushing and competative era, it is most important to have one good hobyy in all kind of people even if for one child, masses aling with work or elders who have been free from their responciblities.This essay is completely agying cricketree with gthe statement and points that will support this statement are elaborated below.

To begin with, in moerden era skills are mor importan then degree and hobbies are main source to develope such kind of skills and these skills can be made whole carrier.For example, many children love playing cricket in their childhood even in their youngege and cricket can be their proffesion such as Virat kohli and Saching tendulkar have hobby to play cricket sport and it has been their proffesion

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Moreover, in fast paced environment people don't have as much time to reduce their stress. Hobbies can reduce anxiety and mind burden by giving happy feelings and in many studies has proven that proffesionals feels calm and feel free when they do their mostliked fun activities. For instance, in reserch shown in Times of India news paper that gorups of people who have one hobby in their life such as playing piano,are more active in their wor then others who don't have.

Lastly, retired people who don't have as much interest to spent their last days of life with many isolating conditions because of the do not have their buddiesare more likely happy with doing their best interestet activitis.In oldage homes many fun activities are to be helding to improve interests of retired people

In conclution. one good hobby can make whole carrier path reduce stress and anxiety and pull back interest of retired people. iIt can imrpove focus and give resons to do best in life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that hobbies are important, and you give relevant reasons involving career development, stress relief and retired people’s wellbeing. The cricket example, including Kohli and Tendulkar, helps illustrate how an interest can become a profession. However, the ideas are only partly developed. The point about children’s skills is difficult to follow, and the sentence ending “to improve interest of re” is incomplete. The discussion of working people is more general than specific, while the point about older people needs a clearer explanation of how hobbies reduce isolation. Develop each reason with a complete explanation and a relevant example to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, three body paragraphs signalled by “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “Lastly,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through your ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because sentences are incomplete or ideas are joined unclearly. For example, the first body paragraph breaks off at “to improve interest of re,” and the transition from children’s hobbies to professional skills is not fully explained. Some linking phrases, such as “For instance,” introduce examples, but the examples are not always connected back to the main point. Use complete sentences, make each paragraph focus on one reason, and add clear links between claim, explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “anxiety,” “stress,” “professionals,” “isolating conditions” and “activities.” These choices show an effort to discuss different benefits of hobbies. However, the range is limited and many spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make the message harder to understand, as in “morden,” “competative,” “hobyy,” “proffesion” and “interestet activitis.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “make whole carrier” and “reduce their stress” in this context. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations, for example, “develop skills,” “pursue a career” and “relieve stress.” More precise vocabulary would help express your ideas without requiring the reader to infer your meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “even if,” “because” and “when.” However, control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and errors frequently make parts of the response difficult to interpret. For example, “in many studies has proven that proffesionals feels calm” lacks a clear grammatical subject and has incorrect subject–verb agreement. The opening sentence also has an unclear structure, while “retired people who don't have as much interest to spent their last days” contains an incomplete construction and an incorrect verb form. Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention too, particularly around the long opening and the conclusion. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses carefully.

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