Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is understandable that the kids, young people, working person and old person wants to atleast one hobby, so different peoples have a different opinion, i shall give my suggestion below paragraph with example.

To begin kids have growing his mind and body so if they do any activity like hobby number of time hobby convert his future profession. if they like something then they do that things by heart, mean the time they have not any hobby then they most of time spend in the social media, watching TV and other useless activity

Other hand younger when they are busy in study life, in between they spend the time for listing music, dancing, watching movies and some plays games, because they like and relax his mind.

The working people have lot of stress in the work, because these time company given the maxmium work load on one person, these type life create more problem, so release this problem. for avoid these problem people reading books, listening music, watching cricket and movies, some are doing the cooking.

At last retired person life after the free time, because they have no work, so whole day they are free so that time they play cards and spend the time with his old friends. some time they are doing the garderning. number of people join the social work NGO becuase they love to help the other peoples.

hense you are any age and any place at least you do not stop your hobbies

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the topic by discussing hobbies for children, young adults, working people and retired people, and your final point—that people should keep hobbies at any age—shows your general view. The examples, such as music, cooking, gardening and social work, are relevant. However, the opinion is not stated clearly at the beginning, where you say that different people have different opinions and will give a suggestion. Several points are also asserted rather than explained: for example, you say hobbies can become a child’s future profession, but do not illustrate how this might happen. Develop the reasons behind each group’s benefits and make your own position explicit from the outset.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: it moves through different age groups and ends with a general conclusion. This makes the main line of discussion understandable. However, the progression is sometimes mechanical, with transitions such as “To begin,” “Other hand” and “At last” doing most of the linking. Some connections between ideas are unclear, particularly the sentence about children spending time on social media if they do not have a hobby, and the shift from young people’s activities to their studies. Paragraphing would also help distinguish the groups more clearly. Use topic sentences to state each paragraph’s main point, then connect examples to that point with clearer referencing and linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate a range of examples, including “stress,” “work load,” “reading books,” “cooking,” “gardening” and “social work.” There are also attempts to express ideas beyond basic lists, such as hobbies becoming a profession. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to follow: “listing music,” “release this problem” and “spend the time with his old friends” are examples. Spelling errors such as “atleast,” “maxmium” and “becuase” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural collocations for benefits and leisure activities, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, using forms such as “because” and “so.” This shows some variety, and the reader can usually identify the intended meaning. However, control is inconsistent, especially with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries. For example, “the kids … wants” should use a plural verb, while “kids have growing his mind and body” needs a clearer verb construction. The opening sentence also joins several ideas without clear punctuation, and “you are any age” does not form a correct conditional clause. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause; check agreement and punctuation during editing.

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