Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Hobby

It is important for children,young adults,working people and retired to have at least one hobby.

Yes hobbies are important to everyone it help to improve the skills and reach their goals .

Hobbies are help to keep busy day in life whenever they have free time use to do their hobby.For example my child have drwaing hobby he use to do nice and beautiful nature drawings .Young adults and retired peoples have most of them gardening and planting trees and pets at home .It helps to people busy in their life and good for health and excercise to body .And they can grow all vegetable plants at their backyards ,fresh fruits vegetables good health .Now dyas in market we not getting fresh and organic fruits and vegetables .

Everywhere,chemical and forzen food it is not good for health in viseversa plants gives us fresh air it protuct from diseases .

Some young people have wall paint hobby it help to make money and became celebraties .Most of hobbies help to earn some money to young people .Example Art and craft now dats we can see most things in market home decorative items availabel and good demand too .

So these kind of hobby help to gain money to young people,keep busy in their own life no chance to learn any bad things or friendship.

They became good and great person in their life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that hobbies are important, and you give relevant reasons, including keeping people occupied, supporting health, and potentially earning money. The examples of your child’s drawing and young people selling crafts help connect the ideas to real situations. However, several points are asserted rather than explained—for instance, the link between hobbies and avoiding “bad things or friendship” is unclear, and the benefits of gardening could be developed more precisely. The response also does not meet the 250-word minimum: it contains 226 words, and the 10 words copied from the task prompt are not counted. Add a fuller explanation and a further relevant example to address the task more completely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a broadly understandable sequence: it states agreement, discusses drawing and gardening, then moves to hobbies as a source of income. Examples such as “my child” and “Art and craft” give the reader some signposts. However, ideas are mostly presented in one long block rather than organised into clear paragraphs, and the progression between points is sometimes difficult to follow. For example, the move from gardening and fresh produce to frozen food and disease prevention is abrupt, while “So these kind of hobby” does not clearly refer to one specific idea. Use separate paragraphs for distinct benefits and connect each example explicitly to the main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic vocabulary, including “hobby,” “gardening,” “planting trees,” “fresh air,” and “earn some money,” which makes your main ideas understandable. There are also attempts to express more specific concepts, such as “organic fruits and vegetables” and “home decorative items.” However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or spellings make parts difficult to interpret, including “wall paint hobby,” “became celebraties,” and “in viseversa.” Some phrases are not natural in context, such as “busy day in life” and “good for health and excercise to body.” Build a wider set of accurate collocations for describing benefits, skills, wellbeing, and income.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can generally identify your intended meaning. You also attempt to link ideas with clauses, as in “whenever they have free time use to do their hobby,” but this construction is incomplete and difficult to follow. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur frequently: “it help” should be “it helps,” “my child have” should be “my child has,” and “he use to do” should be “he does.” Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “a hobby” and “retired people.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are inconsistent, with several ideas joined into long sentences. Practise accurate simple sentences before combining them.

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