Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Hobby is vital for every person in their life. Some people have at least one hoppy. Children, young adults, workers and retired person also have hobby. They do exercise daily. They also make a habit in daily routine.

Firstly, individuals are busy in their jobs therefore they choose minimum time for hobby. They take interest in hobby. They are care to their physical health. They have no creates health issues. They also interested in another activity like playing hockey, cricket, running, jumping. So they feel fresh when they do exercise in daily routine. On other hand students do exercise their mind will be fresh. Their body fitness will be better.

Secondly, some people don't take time to do exercise. They are busy in their works. They don't take interest. Because when they spend much time on duty so, they feel tired and uncomfortable. They have face different obstacle in their life. Exercise is crucial in their life. On other hand, They have bad effects on their stomach. They can't digest food easily. For instance, some members have special hobby. They read general knowledge books in their free time. Because they interest to get more information. It is good habit to all people. They managed time for exercise.

Finally, some students,workers and adults should do exercise daily. They should suggest to sorrounding living people. They take time to do exercise. They make a routine in their life. In the morning time, exercise has good effects on physical and mentally freshness. So this is so important in all people life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You express a general view that hobbies or exercise are important for people of different ages, and you give relevant examples such as playing sports and reading general-knowledge books. However, the response does not consistently address the task’s broader meaning of “hobby”: it focuses mainly on exercise and health, with little explanation of why hobbies matter to young adults, working people, or retired people specifically. Your position is suggested by “Hobby is vital,” but the reasons are repetitive and often unclear, such as the claim that people “have no creates health issues.” To strengthen the response, state your opinion clearly and develop two distinct reasons, explaining how different hobbies can benefit people at different life stages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an opening, several body paragraphs, and a concluding paragraph, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Finally” show an attempt to organise ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because points about exercise, work, digestion, reading, and students are introduced without clear links or development. Some connections are confusing, for example, “On other hand students do exercise their mind will be fresh,” and “They managed time for exercise” follows a point about reading. Repeated references to exercise also make the argument feel circular. Group related ideas into paragraphs, use clear topic sentences, and ensure each example directly supports the paragraph’s main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “physical health,” “routine,” “free time,” and “obstacle,” and examples such as “playing hockey, cricket” help make the subject clear. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “exercise,” “hobby,” and “daily.” Some choices or combinations are inaccurate and make meaning unclear, such as “They are care to their physical health,” “They have no creates health issues,” and “surrounding living people.” Aim to use more precise vocabulary for different kinds of hobbies and their benefits, and learn natural word partnerships. For example, distinguish “take up a hobby” from “exercise regularly,” rather than treating them as interchangeable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can understand the general topic, but frequent errors in sentence formation and agreement sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “Children, young adults, workers and retired person also have hobby,” “They are care to their physical health,” and “They have face different obstacle in their life.” There are also incomplete or poorly connected clauses, as in “Because when they spend much time on duty so, they feel tired,” and inconsistent punctuation and capitalisation, including “On other hand, They.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles and plural forms, and build longer sentences with one clear main clause and correctly joined supporting information.

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