Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays people are so busy with thire works. At the same time children and young adults are buys with there job and studys.But the same time we need to spend some time with our hoppy.

Its is very important to every one have some extra hobby make them happly

some eldarly people are spend time with kids and family. Moreover they have some personal intersting. For example one of my grand father after retiredment til he like to learn some muscis instrument now he attendening the class and make him busy. Also he going with his grand children. hobby's also one of learning lessons so there is no age limite.for that resason some that school are invite to do some activities like drawing,sports, cultural events make them create some hoppy.

Althoug nowdays most of the adults people working very hard for there family.For that they do not spend time with friends, for that reasons also they get stressed.however if they have some hoppy. They can releife from stress.happy make you happy. when you love do somthing you will get achive perfectly.Also some reserach say who have extra hobby the brain working perfectly.One of my frined started YouTube just for hoppy.

whatever new Technolygysis coming the the marke he just studyed about that and explaint to people.Way of teching can any one understand.

In my opinion every one should have hobby. Becuse it is cure your stress,

it make you refresh and joy. Human always searching for new ideas. So make your life full joy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the conclusion: “every one should have hobby,” and you give relevant reasons, including stress relief, enjoyment, learning, and staying active after retirement. The examples of your grandfather attending music classes and your friend creating YouTube content help connect the topic to real experience. However, the discussion is uneven: the benefits for retired people and working adults receive some explanation, while the opening reference to children and young adults is not developed in comparable detail. Several claims, such as hobbies making the brain work “perfectly,” are asserted rather than explained. Develop each age group with a specific benefit and clarify how your examples support your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from a general introduction to examples and benefits, then gives a concluding opinion. Paragraph breaks also help separate parts of the discussion. However, the progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and several ideas are joined without clear relationships. For example, the paragraph about adults shifts from family responsibilities to stress, research, and a YouTube example without explaining the links. Connectors such as “for that” and “also” are repeated or used imprecisely, while “however” does not always introduce a clear contrast. Use one main idea per paragraph, order supporting details logically, and make references such as “they” or “that” unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “retirement,” “personal interest,” “activities,” “stress,” and “cultural events.” These choices show that you can discuss hobbies and their benefits, and examples such as learning a musical instrument add useful specificity. However, the range is limited and many spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts of the response difficult to understand, including “hoppy,” “happly,” “releife,” and “Technolygysis.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “make them busy” and “make your life full joy.” Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for discussing wellbeing, leisure, and personal development; this will make your meaning clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use mostly simple statements and make some attempts to connect clauses, for example, “Although nowadays most of the adults people working very hard for there family.” However, many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction, which sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Examples include “Its is very important to every one have,” “some elderly people are spend time,” and “he attendening the class.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “hobby. They can releife from stress.happy make you happy.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with correct verb forms. Proofread for complete sentences, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation.

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