Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby.

What's your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern days,people may have one hobbie dispite their different ages.In my opinion i do not think it is good to have one hobbie,So in this essay i am going to elabote why having more than one hobbie is important.

Children they may have many hobbies than working people because they have lot of free time after school than people who goes to work they are only free on weekend only and some may get offdays once a week and its different from kids so they can do a lot of things after doing their homework,for instance they can watch TV after that they can read a novel or go for a walk with a dog, but a working person can only do one thing after work because they will be tired and need to rest.

Retired people they aslo have plenty of time so they can also have many hobbies such as reading newspapers,going for a walk,playing golf and even hiking because they do not have things to do so they can have as many hobbies as they want to keep themselves busy all day. On the other hand there are young youths, these one they can also have many hobbies but it depends on the individual ,because some of them they are still at college so they will be busy with college life.

In conclusion its is important to have many things to do as hobbies it keeps you busy and occupied and you learn new things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear general opinion that people should have more than one hobby, and you discuss children, working people, retired people and young adults. The examples—such as reading, walking and playing golf—are relevant to the topic. However, the response only partly develops the task: the prompt asks whether each group should have at least one hobby, while your argument shifts to whether people should have many hobbies. The claim that working people can do “only one thing after work” is also asserted rather than explained, and the young-adult point is brief. Keep your position focused on the value of having at least one hobby, then explain and support that view for the different groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly group ideas by age or life stage. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression is limited because the main argument changes from having at least one hobby to having many, and several sentences join multiple ideas without clear boundaries. For example, the children paragraph moves from free time to work schedules, then to activities, and ends with tiredness, all in one long sentence. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” do not clearly signal a contrast with the preceding point. Use shorter, more controlled sentences and make each paragraph develop one clear reason supporting your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic vocabulary, including “free time,” “hobbies,” “retired people,” “reading newspapers” and “playing golf,” which makes the general subject understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, especially “many hobbies” and “busy,” and several spelling or word-form errors are noticeable, including “hobbie,” “dispite” and “elabote.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “young youths” and “things to do as hobbies.” These limitations make parts of the response less natural and occasionally slow the reader. Aim to use accurate, varied phrases for leisure activities and explain ideas with more precise wording rather than repeating the same terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic structures to compare groups, but control is inconsistent. Many sentences contain errors in sentence boundaries, agreement and clause structure. For example, “Children they may have many hobbies” has an unnecessary subject repetition, while “people who goes to work” has incorrect agreement. The opening also contains several run-on sentences and missing punctuation, making the relationships between ideas harder to follow. Most structures are simple, and attempts to combine clauses often become faulty. Practise writing one complete idea per sentence, checking subject–verb agreement and using full stops and commas accurately. More reliable control of these basics will make your argument clearer.

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