Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The younger sister of one of your friends is thinking about spending a year studying abroad as part of her university course. You did this recently, and she has asked you about your experience.

Write a letter to your friend's sister. In your letter

• tell her where you studied during your year abroad

• describe what you learnt about the country you studied in

• explain why your year abroad was helpful for your studies

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear........,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Nitika,

I am going to write this letter to share my experience about university where i did my study.

As you know, i went to Canda 1 year before, i studied in Kwantlien Polytechnic University which is located in Surrey, BC. I did one year Post graduate diploma in Human Resourse Management . I got 78% from this diploma.

I did not only learnt study but also i learnt lot of things about this Nation during 1 year study. I came to know about their national flower Maple which is also in the national flag of Canada. I see that this flower change its colour according to season. Apart from this, i learnt about their festivals, how people celeberate festiwals. For example, I really like the festiwal of helowin, on this festival, children enjoyed a lot. Lastly, there is a lot of indian restaurant available so you do not need to worry about indian food.

This one year was very beneficial for my future. I learnt a lot of valuable lessona about business during my study because KPU has experience stafff who are very soft spoken and a lot of knowledge in their area. Now, i am thinking to start my business in India which will be easy for me as i have knowledge to start business.

I hope ths information will be valueable for you.

Yours sincerely,

Sukhpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify Kwantlen Polytechnic University in Surrey, describe aspects of Canadian life such as the maple leaf, festivals and food, and explain how the course supported your business plans. The details about your diploma and the 78% result also make the account personal. This meets the task well, though the learning about Canada is more a list of observations than an explanation of what you understood about the country, and the study benefit could be linked more specifically to your university studies rather than mainly to starting a business. To strengthen the letter, develop one or two examples—for instance, explain what a festival taught you about Canadian culture or how a particular business lesson applies to your course. The friendly purpose is clear, but the opening could sound more direct and natural.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph about Canada, a paragraph on the value of the year, and a closing. Sequencing phrases such as “Apart from this,” “For example,” and “Lastly” help readers follow the examples. The progression is generally logical, although some linking feels mechanical, and the opening sentence (“I am going to write this letter to share my experience”) repeats the purpose rather than moving directly into the experience. References such as “this flower” are understandable, but the paragraph would flow better if the ideas were grouped around culture and daily life rather than presented as a series of separate facts. A more natural opening and a few clearer links between the learning experience and its academic benefit would make the organisation more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “Post graduate diploma,” “Human Resource Management,” “national flower,” and “business.” There are also attempts to describe people and experiences, such as “soft spoken.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “Canda,” “celeberate,” “festiwal,” “helowin,” and “lessona.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “share my experience about university,” “learnt study,” and “a lot of knowledge in their area.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding the letter, but they limit precision and naturalness. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases, such as “gain knowledge” and “celebrate a festival,” rather than translating directly from another language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentences, including “I did not only learnt study but also…” and the explanation beginning “because KPU has…”. The main message remains understandable, but there are some errors in verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and punctuation. For example, “I did not only learnt” needs a consistent verb pattern, while “I see that this flower change its colour” shifts tense and has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence beginning “As you know” also joins several ideas with commas, making its structure less controlled. Capitalisation of “I” and punctuation around sentence endings need attention as well. Practise accurate past-tense narration and build longer sentences with clear clauses; this will help you show greater grammatical range without losing control.

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