Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The younger sister of one of your friends is thinking about spending a year studying abroad as part of her university course. You did this recently, and she has asked you about your experience.

Write a letter to your friend's sister. In your letter

• tell her where you studied during your year abroad

• describe what you learnt about the country you studied in

• explain why your year abroad was helpful for your studies

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear........,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

My dear sister

I hope you are feel good, I wuld like share my abroad study jurney and study process similary here environment.

first of all, last year I came Germany when I reach here I had gone own appartment in the second day I went to universty I took class the class is very interesting here is study environment is very special furthermore is very amazing environment for education.

If you will come here for study you ate take ielts test and start the process for the september intake you will reach in the august when are you reach here I will help you the starting day.

In finally my opinion are you start the process now becouse Germony universty teacher is extreme level teach to rhe student.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The letter makes a limited attempt to respond: it mentions Germany and says the writer attended university classes, but it does not clearly explain what was learned about the country. The statement that the study environment was “very special” is too general to fulfil that point, and the explanation of how the year helped the writer’s studies is also missing; advice about IELTS and the September intake does not replace this personal account. The response is therefore only minimally relevant to the requested experience. It also falls short of the stated 150-word minimum, leaving little space to develop the required points. Address each bullet directly with specific details, such as a cultural observation and a concrete academic benefit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence, beginning with an introduction, moving to the experience in Germany, and ending with advice. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear, purposeful paragraphs, and the progression is difficult to follow because several points are crowded into long sentences. Connectors such as “first of all,” “furthermore,” and “in finally” are attempted, but they do not consistently show the relationship between ideas; “furthermore” repeats the general point about the environment rather than advancing it. The reference to “here” is also unclear for a reader who does not know where the writer is. Use separate paragraphs for the location, cultural learning, and academic benefit, with clear links between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses basic vocabulary relevant to studying abroad, including “university,” “class,” “environment,” and “education,” so the general topic can be recognised. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the letter harder to understand, for example “jurney,” “appartment,” “similary,” and “Germony.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “study process similary here environment” and “teacher is extreme level teach.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and more specific vocabulary to describe the country and academic experience. Proofreading spelling and choosing precise phrases would make the message clearer and more suitable for a friendly letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing attempts to combine ideas in longer sentences, but control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “I hope you are feel good” has an incorrect verb form, while “I wuld like share” omits the infinitive marker and has an incorrect verb form. Tense and clause structure are also problematic in “last year I came Germany when I reach here I had gone own appartment,” making the sequence of events difficult to follow. The response relies mainly on simple statements and does not show reliable control of more varied sentence patterns. Practise accurate past-tense narration and sentence boundaries, and check articles, prepositions, and subject–verb agreement when editing.

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