Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The younger sister of one of your friends is thinking about spending a year studying abroad as part of her university course. You did this recently, and she has asked you about your experience.

Write a letter to your friend's sister. In your letter

• tell her where you studied during your year abroad

• describe what you learnt about the country you studied in

• explain why your year abroad was helpful for your studies

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear........,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

dear raman ,

i heared form baljot that you want to study oversea and wand to know more about and i am very happy to share my expwerience of study in canada with you. when i was came to canada i did study in vacouver community coolege the public and most reputable college of the british columbia with the program of culinary arts. the most intrusting thing was i nothing know about the cooking.

the duration of my progmram was eighteen months and in these eighteen months i learned lots.my course was started with the basic knife skills learning and i almost spend my one month and in the first month i was thinking that it was boring but as it further continued i learned lot of thing with interust, when i was in india i never known about theglobal quisine but with this course i learned diffrent cousine and i also did butchery aswell as pastery during these eighteen months i learned about how work in the hotels, restaurants because we are the personm who not only prep the food but also serve to the guest in our college. this course was also offering me the red seal by skill trade program and i did my professional cook level one and two certification with this program . after completing my study i wasplaced at the most well known restaurant of the vancouver called jw marriot for my internship when i did real service for one month, the most unbelieveable thing was that on the last day the head chef called me and offer me job of prep cook after seeing my performance and that was my best day . so i think to study in abroad was very helpful for me because i not only doing my further study for red seal but also i do job in reputable businesss and i also suggest you to come here and study because you get lot of oppertunity to diffrent fields and you also enjoying your life independently and the government of this country is very supportive to the young youth.

lastly i am waiting for you and i misss you lot .

your faithfully

charanjit singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all the required bullet points of the prompt effectively. You clearly stated where you studied (Vancouver Community College in British Columbia for culinary arts), described what you learned about the country and culture (learning about global cuisines, butchery, pastry, and experiencing a supportive government and independent lifestyle), and explained why it was helpful for your studies (gaining certifications like the Red Seal and securing an internship that led to a job offer). The tone is appropriately friendly and conversational for a letter to a friend's sister. Ideas are well-extended and supported with personal anecdotes, showing a clear purpose throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter maintains a clear overall progression from the initial greeting through your experiences to your final advice and closing. However, the organization is hindered by a lack of proper paragraphing, as the main body is written as one very long block of text. Cohesive devices such as 'when', 'and', 'but', and 'so' are used, but sentences are frequently strung together with coordinating conjunctions rather than being broken down logically. Referencing is generally clear, but the lack of paragraph breaks makes the flow mechanical and requires the reader to work harder to follow the progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss your studies and experiences, incorporating relevant topic-specific terms such as 'culinary arts', 'knife skills', 'global cuisine', 'butchery', and 'internship'. However, there are numerous spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'heared', 'oversea', 'expwerience', 'vancouver', 'coolege', 'intrusting', 'progmram', 'interust', 'diffrent', 'cousine', 'pastery', 'personm', 'prep', 'oppertunity', and 'businesss'. While these errors do not completely impede communication because the context is clear, their frequency prevents you from achieving a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with attempts at relative clauses and subordinate clauses (e.g., 'when i was came to canada i did study...', 'after completing my study i was placed...'). However, there are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors, including tense inconsistencies, incorrect verb forms ('i was came', 'i nothing know', 'i never known', 'i not only doing'), missing capitalisation, and run-on sentences joined by commas instead of proper punctuation. These errors are noticeable and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, though the core meaning usually remains understandable.

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