Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The younger sister of one of your friends is thinking about spending a year studying abroad as part of her university course. You did this recently, and she has asked you about your experience.

Write a letter to your friend's sister. In your letter

• tell her where you studied during your year abroad

• describe what you learnt about the country you studied in

• explain why your year abroad was helpful for your studies

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear........,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Good morning Reena,

I hope you are doing well

I heard from your sister who is my friend that you want to grab your study in foreign country for further study. This is absolutely right decision related your education. Last two years, I finished my study in culinary management course that is almost two years diploma in Main campus of St clair college. This is in Windsor of Ontario province, Canada. My institution was huge in space and divide in different parts of building. I took course in food field and mostly in practical skills in labs. I had 3 to 4 subjects paperbase and rest of just practically. Now, this course is very beneficial for me as I select same field in life and getting good pay in Canada. There are also accommodations available for students for limited time and cheap price. I would like to suggest you that there is all types of course available in which you want to choose. whenever you will take college here then i will you more information about this.

I hope you have understand everything and if you need my help just let me know for adopting any course or university.

Thank you

Rupinder Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give some relevant information about studying at St Clair College in Windsor, Ontario, and explain that the course helped you enter the same field and earn a good salary. However, the task’s central points are only minimally addressed: the country is identified, but you say little about what you learnt about Canada itself, and the benefit to your studies is not clearly explained beyond choosing the same career field. Much of the letter instead describes the college, course format, and accommodation, which does not fully answer the prompts. The advice about available courses is also vague. Develop each requested point with specific details—for example, a cultural or practical insight about Canada and a clear explanation of how studying abroad improved your academic skills.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable opening, a main body, and a closing, and the information generally stays connected to studying abroad. However, the main paragraph moves abruptly from the college’s location to its size, course structure, career benefits, and accommodation, without clear progression between the task points. Linking phrases such as “Now” and “whenever” do not always show the relationship between ideas, and the final offer of help is difficult to follow. Separate the letter into paragraphs organised around the location and experience, what you learnt, and how the year supported your studies. Clearer transitions and more precise references would make the message easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “culinary management,” “practical skills,” “accommodations,” and “university.” There are also attempts to express advice and benefits. However, several word choices and collocations are noticeably inaccurate or unclear, such as “grab your study,” “subjects paperbase,” and “cheap price.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to understand, while repeated general terms such as “course” and “study” limit precision. Aim for natural phrases such as “continue your studies abroad,” “theoretical subjects,” and “affordable accommodation.” Checking word forms and common collocations will help you express your experience more clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “Now, this course is very beneficial for me as I select same field in life.” However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors in tense, articles, agreement, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make parts of the letter difficult to read. Examples include “I hope you have understand,” “there is all types of course,” and “then i will you more information.” The opening also needs punctuation after “I hope you are doing well.” Practise forming complete clauses and checking verb forms: “I hope you have understood,” “there are all types of courses,” and “I will give you more information.” More accurate basic sentences should come before adding complexity.

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