Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The younger sister of one of your friends is thinking about spending a year studying abroad as part of her university course. You did this recently, and she has asked you about your experience.

Write a letter to your friend's sister. In your letter

• tell her where you studied during your year abroad

• describe what you learnt about the country you studied in

• explain why your year abroad was helpful for your studies

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear........,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear saba,

I hope you are doing well, I am writing this letter to discuss about spending a year studying abroad as part of my university course. This is because you are thinking to move abroad for studies. i want to share my experience and guide you during your study . I have done software enginering, it is about four years course which i have complete in abroad S P L ,UNIVERSITY, in UK. I highly recommend for you to take addimission in this university is one of the best in all over the world and well known in abroad. When i completed my degree , I wascapable to move anywhere.This is because the value of international university course. So in abroad the system of education is practical , But on the otherhand here education system is change that is why this university has very valid in all over the world.I hope you would like to take the addimission in forigen .thanks for guiding.

Your welwisher,

Zahida

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the university and country—“S P L University, in UK”—and give a general reason the experience helped, saying the international degree made you “capable to move anywhere.” However, the task is only partially addressed: you do not explain what you learnt about the country itself, and the benefit to your studies is asserted rather than illustrated with a specific example. Much of the letter shifts into recommending the university and discussing education systems, rather than describing your own year abroad. To strengthen the response, describe a concrete cultural or practical discovery about the UK and explain how studying there improved your knowledge or skills for your course.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The letter has a recognisable opening, body and sign-off, and the reader can follow its broad purpose. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression through the three requested points. The opening repeats that you are writing to share your experience, then the response moves from your degree and university to career mobility and a comparison of education systems without clear transitions. Connect each paragraph or section to one task point, and use linking phrases to show how the experience led to a specific study benefit. The closing, “thanks for guiding,” is also unclear in relation to the letter’s purpose. Clearer sequencing and more precise connections would make the message easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to education, including “university course,” “practical,” “international university” and “value,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “thinking to move abroad,” “take addimission,” and “well known in abroad.” Spelling errors such as “enginering,” “addimission” and “forigen” also reduce accuracy. Aim to use natural phrases for study abroad and describe the country with more specific vocabulary, rather than repeating broad claims about the university. More accurate collocations and spelling would make your meaning clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the main message is usually understandable. However, control is uneven, particularly in longer sentences. For example, “I hope you are doing well, I am writing…” joins two complete clauses with only a comma, while “which i have complete in abroad” has problems with the verb form and sentence construction. There are also errors in articles and prepositions, as in “in UK” and “capable to move anywhere,” and capitalisation is inconsistent. Practise separating complete ideas with full stops or using conjunctions, and check verb forms and article use. These changes would make your sentences more accurate and easier to read.

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