Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The younger sister of one of your friends is thinking about spending a year studying abroad as part of her university course. You did this recently, and she has asked you about your experience.

Write a letter to your friend's sister. In your letter

• tell her where you studied during your year abroad

• describe what you learnt about the country you studied in

• explain why your year abroad was helpful for your studies

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear........,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Raman,

I am writing this letter to about a abroad unversity course. I heard a sister your many intelligent stutdent. I think meet a sis weeding. I heard on your decide a abroad study. I suggest your toronto at cambridge college. I doing a 2 years course on a law study in cambridge college. This college fee very cheape and good college. college teacher very helpful and hardworking.

I suggest a your choose a canada country because this country very helpful a student. This country give a many benefit and this college give a scholarships accoding a student percentage and this country very safe for girl.

I think canada country is very good for study. because this country many faclities avaliable and give more helpful country. I doing the 2 years course and this very heplful me. I think you choose a canada country.

Hoping a prompt respons,

Yours faithfully,

Jaspreet kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The letter makes a relevant attempt to advise the recipient, naming Canada and Cambridge College and mentioning tuition, scholarships, safety and helpful teachers. However, it only minimally fulfils the specific prompts. The place of study is unclear: “toronto at cambridge college” and “in cambridge college” do not establish where you actually studied. The country-learning point is mostly replaced by general claims about benefits and facilities, rather than describing what you discovered about Canadian life or culture. The explanation of how the year abroad helped your studies is also vague; “this very helpful me” does not say what academic skills or knowledge improved. Give clear, personal details for each prompt and support them with examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic letter shape, with a greeting, several paragraphs and a closing, and it moves broadly from the study destination to reasons for choosing Canada. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow the account. The opening shifts from writing about a course to mentioning a sister and a wedding, which does not connect clearly to the purpose. The repeated statements that Canada is good for study do not build a clear progression, and links such as “because” do not always connect complete, understandable ideas. Organise the letter around the three requested points, using one focused paragraph for each and clear transitions between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice problems that sometimes strain understanding. The writer uses relevant terms such as “scholarships,” “college,” “course” and “safe,” but repeats “helpful” and “country” without much precision. Several phrases are difficult to interpret, including “a abroad university course,” “a many benefit” and “more helpful country.” Spelling errors such as “unversity,” “stutdent,” “cheape” and “faclities” also reduce clarity. Build a more accurate range for describing study and cultural experience—for example, academic support, living costs, local customs and communication skills—and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, and frequent errors in sentence structure and basic grammar sometimes make the intended meaning unclear. Examples include “I am writing this letter to about a abroad unversity course,” “I heard a sister your” and “This college fee very cheape”; these lack grammatical connections or necessary verb forms. There are also repeated problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “this country give a many benefit” and “because this country many faclities avaliable.” The closing sentence, “Hoping a prompt respons,” is also incomplete. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check articles, verb agreement and punctuation. Add some accurate compound or complex sentences once these basics are secure.

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