Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Family members working together in their family business is common in many countries of the world. I believe there are more negative effects to this than positive.

On the one hand, some may say that working together with family in family business makes it easier for the family to build a business empire. This is because with every family member on board, there is a uniform goal and it is easier to grow with everyone moving in same direction. Furthermore, it gives the younger ones in the family an early leverage in life over their peers. This is because unlike average of their mates, they are starting their work life from an already existing platform of which they must have already gotten some level of experience over the years as part of being a member of the family.

On the other hand, having family members work together in their family business can lead to hatred among relatives thereby causing division. If any family member becomes greedy along the line, it can result to great hatred for them and this does not help build a healthy family. In addition, it hinders family members from fulfiling personal dreams. This is because if they are focused on building the family business there is a high possibility they will not think of having a life outside the family business as a result they live out the dreams of their parents and not theirs.

In conclusion, having members of the family work together in the family business can be beneficial as it fosters empire establishment as well as aiding the younger ones in life. Nevertheless, it can cause divison in the family through hatred for one another and also limit family members from achieving personal goals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, and the conclusion restates this view. You address both sides with relevant points, including shared goals and early work experience as benefits, and family conflict and restricted personal ambitions as drawbacks. However, some ideas are more fully explained than others. The point about a “uniform goal” is developed with a reason, while the claim that greed causes hatred is asserted without a specific example or explanation of how such conflict might arise. The discussion of personal dreams is relevant but could also be illustrated. To strengthen the response, explain each main point more precisely and support it with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs presenting advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” makes the direction of the argument easy to follow. Ideas generally progress logically within each paragraph, and the conclusion brings together the main points. Some linking is mechanical, however, particularly the repeated “This is because” in the advantages paragraph. The final paragraph also repeats the body’s points rather than drawing them together into a sharper final judgement. To move further, vary the ways you connect explanations and examples, and use referencing or concise summary to avoid repeating the same wording and ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary to discuss family businesses, including “uniform goal,” “build a business empire,” “personal dreams,” and “achieving personal goals.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and some phrases show an attempt to express more specific concepts. However, several word choices or collocations are awkward or imprecise, such as “early leverage in life,” “result to great hatred,” and “fosters empire establishment.” There are also spelling or word-form slips, including “fulfiling” and “divison.” These do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim for familiar, accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe how a business “gains an advantage” rather than using “leverage” in this context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and subordinate clauses: “If any family member becomes greedy…” and “This is because if they are focused…” Most sentences communicate their meaning clearly, and the paragraph structure supports readability. Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “moving in same direction” needs an article (“in the same direction”), and “it can result to” uses an incorrect preposition in this pattern (“result in”). The long sentence beginning “This is because if they are focused…” would be clearer with more controlled clause structure and punctuation. There is also an agreement issue in “having family members work together … can lead,” where the subject construction is awkward. Continue using complex sentences, but check articles, verb patterns, and clause boundaries.

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