Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I strongly believe that working with family business have many advantages than disadvantage and i will talk all about it.

On the one hand, business is the key to success and it will definitely increase a lot business and ideas with different mind set and working in a family business it is a lot easier than it looks, moreover, family business got a truth worthy guy into thier business for sure because it has family values and it grows naturally because a family member is already there for you to teach things about business in addition, family always support each other no matter what happens they stick together and work harder then ever.

On the other hand, if someone try to start their own business in any business it will take a lot efforts which not everyone are able to do. Some people might get huge losses into their business and run back to family to recuse them but if we are already helping into our already running business then it is less risky moreover, family grow together and generates wealth and in tough times they are together and celebration also happens very often into families.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall opinion in the opening, arguing that family businesses have more advantages, and you include relevant points such as trust, mutual support, shared learning and reduced risk. However, the response addresses the question only partially: the disadvantages are not really explained, and the discussion mostly shifts to the risks of starting a business independently. Several claims, such as family businesses growing naturally or family members working harder, are asserted rather than supported with a specific example or explanation. The response is also 54 words below the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to develop both sides. To strengthen the answer, explain at least one genuine drawback, such as family disagreements affecting work, and support your main reasons with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable structure, with an opening opinion followed by paragraphs introduced by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand.” This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the second paragraph presents advantages, while the final paragraph mainly compares family businesses with starting a business alone rather than developing disadvantages. Many points are crowded into long sentences, and connectors such as “moreover” and “in addition” are used repeatedly without clearly showing how each idea relates to the previous one. The ending also lacks a concluding statement that directly answers the question. Use shorter, focused paragraphs, group related reasons together, and make the contrast between advantages and disadvantages explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small range of relevant vocabulary, including “family values,” “huge losses,” “wealth” and “tough times,” so the general topic is understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “truth worthy guy” does not express the intended idea of a trustworthy employee, and “run back to family to recuse them” is unclear. There are also spelling errors such as “thier” and “recuse,” alongside repeated general words such as “business,” “family” and “together.” Aim for more precise expressions and check spelling; for instance, describe how relatives can “share responsibilities” or “pool resources” rather than relying on broad claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic linking structures, but the range of sentence forms is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors occur frequently in agreement and verb forms: “working with family business have” should use a singular subject and an appropriate article, while “if someone try” needs a third-person verb form. Other examples include “not everyone are able” and “family grow together.” Several sentences run on, particularly the long sentence beginning “On the one hand,” where multiple ideas are joined without clear punctuation. These errors can make the reader work to understand the relationships between ideas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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