Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is undeniable to say that in many countries, family members work togather in their family business. However it has some advantages and disadvantages. I am going to discuss both of these.

There are multifarious reasons to support my dogma.There are many advantages of working in family business. Firstly, you can work with your father and your siblings. You can get experience from your father. Secondly, you don't need to waste time to find job. You can work in flaxibal hours. Thirdly, you can take some responsibilities of your father. You can learn how to do business from experienced persons of company. Finally, in this way you can spend time with your family.

However, apart from its advantages it has some disadvantages too. Moreover, as if you don't have interest in your family business. You are wasting your time. Furthermore, you want to do something else. In which you have interest and you have knowledge and experience. Apart from this, as on advance pace of life and in technological era, many people want to start their own business to develope their own country and some people prefer to go to forigen country for development and better future of their family.

To cap it all, I would like to say that it is depend on their own choice and interest as they want to work togather in their family business or start uo their own business.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic by presenting advantages and disadvantages, including learning from experienced relatives, flexible hours, and the possibility of preferring another career. However, the task asks whether family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages, and your conclusion says this depends on personal choice rather than giving a clear comparative judgement. Several points are listed but not explained with specific examples or consequences, so the response only partially develops its ideas. The discussion of starting a business to develop a country or moving abroad is not clearly connected to the comparison. The response also falls 15 words short of the required minimum. To improve, state your position directly and support two or three relevant points with concrete examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on advantages, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “However,” and “To cap it all” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear because points are presented as short, separate statements rather than being linked and explained. The disadvantage paragraph is particularly difficult to follow: “Moreover, as if you don’t have interest…” and “In which you have interest…” do not form clear connections to the preceding ideas. Some transitions, including “Furthermore” and “Apart from this,” are used mechanically. Develop each main point in a logical sequence and use pronouns and linking phrases that make the relationships between ideas explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “responsibilities,” “experienced persons,” “technological era,” and “development,” and the reader can generally identify your intended meaning. There are also attempts at less common or formal expressions, such as “multifarious reasons” and “To cap it all.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits clarity: “support my dogma” does not suit the intended meaning, and “flaxibal hours” appears to mean flexible hours. Spelling errors such as “togather,” “develope,” and “forigen” are noticeable, while “start uo” is unclear. Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than unusually formal words, and proofread spelling. A smaller set of precise business-related terms would make your ideas clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use mostly simple sentence patterns, with some attempts to connect ideas using clauses, but the range is limited and complex constructions are often faulty. For example, “Moreover, as if you don’t have interest in your family business” is an incomplete clause, and “In which you have interest and you have knowledge and experience” is also a fragment. The conclusion contains errors in sentence structure and verb form: “it is depend on their own choice” should be expressed with a correctly formed verb, such as “it depends on their own choice.” Punctuation is also inconsistent, as in “dogma.There,” where a space is missing after the full stop. Practise complete sentences, accurate clause connections, and basic verb patterns before attempting more complex structures.

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