Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, having an own business can make anyone life easier, happier and secured from financial crisis. Therefore, in most of the countires, family members would like to join their family business from their early age. I believe, it has more advantages than disadvangates which I am going to explain in the coming paragraph of this essay.

To commence with, having this business build trust and loyalty between family members. In other words, every businesses in the world runs on two important aspects: great trust and loyalty which can only be provided from family member rather than from ther outsiders. In addition, commitment also plays a vital role, because without dedication nothing works to make any business more bigger and it can only be done with the help of closed ones. For instance, Reliance Industry

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear opinion—“it has more advantages than disadvantages”—and begin to explain benefits such as trust, loyalty and commitment among relatives. These points are relevant to the question, but the response addresses it only partially: it gives no disadvantages or comparison, and the example “Reliance Industry” is unfinished and does not show how the business supports your argument. The essay also stops before developing its ideas or providing a conclusion. The response is 134 words, below the required 250, which leaves too little space to explain your position and support it. To improve, discuss both sides, explain each point with a specific example, and complete the essay with a conclusion that directly answers the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph introduces your position, and “To commence with” signals the start of a supporting point. Connectors such as “In other words,” “In addition,” and “For instance” also show an effort to link ideas. However, there is no clear overall progression because the response ends during the example, with no further paragraph or conclusion. Some links are mechanical, and the relationship between the claim about trust and the broad statement about businesses is not fully explained. Develop a clear sequence—introduction, separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and conclusion—and use linking phrases only where they accurately show how each idea relates to the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “trust,” “loyalty,” “commitment,” and “dedication,” which helps communicate the intended benefits of family businesses. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “plays a vital role.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make the writing less natural: “having an own business,” “secured from financial crisis,” and “more bigger” are not appropriate forms, while “countires” and “disadvangates” are misspelled. “Closed ones” is also less natural than “close relatives.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary for costs and benefits would also help you explain both sides of the question.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including the clause beginning “because without dedication…” and the relative clause “which can only be provided…”. This shows some willingness to vary sentence structure. However, errors occur frequently and sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. For example, “having this business build trust” needs a correctly formed subject–verb structure, and “every businesses … runs” has disagreement between the determiner, noun and verb. The opening also needs an article and possessive form in “having an own business,” while “I believe, it has” is incorrectly punctuated. Practise checking agreement, articles, sentence boundaries and punctuation, and prioritise accurate, complete sentences before adding more complex clauses.

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