Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Alote of countries family member start business and work eachother and grow business together.

first of all. business is very important thing for education for future similarly for growing. alote of people start business alone everyday they people go for his business place but every time they people lived under the pressure becouse he is alone. people and family is not support his bussiness becouse he start business is alone. that people start business own family. The family business is very intersting bussiniss if a person go to for his own work but he is nat get a pressure becouse 2nd person going to his own business. the familly business is growing very quickly.

furthermore. family business is better than alone business for example some time one person busy in home or other wise but brother or sister go to the business place similarly some time one brother go to for meetine other company but his brother or father growin business.

In the last, my opinion if family business is better than the alone business.If I start the business I start the family business becouse some time I would busy I will no tension becouse my business is not close my brothers would growing business .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall preference for family businesses, especially in the conclusion: “my opinion if family business is better than the alone business.” You also provide relevant reasons, such as relatives covering the business when another person is busy or attending a meeting. However, the response addresses the question only partially: it focuses almost entirely on advantages and does not consider any disadvantages, and the reasons are not developed with specific examples or explanation. The opening is also difficult to interpret, so your position is not clear from the start. The response is 206 words, below the required 250. To strengthen your answer, state your view clearly in the introduction, discuss at least one disadvantage, and explain each point with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organisation: you begin with an introduction, use separate paragraphs for reasons, and finish with your opinion. The examples about a sibling taking over when someone is busy and a brother or father continuing the work are relevant to your main point. However, progression between ideas is limited, and the paragraphs do not consistently build a clear argument. Connectors such as “first of all,” “furthermore,” and “In the last” are used mechanically, while several sentences repeat the same idea about family members supporting the business. Some references, such as “that people,” are unclear. Use a clearer sequence—position, reason, explanation, example—and vary linking phrases while making sure each sentence connects logically to the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic but includes some topic-relevant terms, including “family business,” “pressure,” and “company.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “business” and “alone business.” Frequent spelling and word-choice problems sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow, as in “intersting bussiniss” and “growin business.” Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “go to for his own work” and “business is not close.” Work on accurate spelling and common collocations for this topic, such as “run a business,” “share responsibilities,” and “keep the business operating.” Using a wider range of precise terms would help you explain both benefits and drawbacks more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and conditions, for example, “some time one person busy in home or other wise but brother or sister go to the business place.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, and attempts at longer sentences are often faulty. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently: “family member start business,” “he is nat get a pressure,” and “my brothers would growing business.” These errors can make the intended meaning difficult to understand. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense and agreement. For example, write “A family member can run the business when another is busy” rather than joining several ideas without clear grammatical links.

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